Dragon's Lair
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Thread Topic: Dragon's Lair
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i was almost late for STEAM so i hit send way to fast XD
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Harper sighed and walked over to one of the punching bags and started punching it. He had heard that there were going to be new recruits today. He wondered which ones would be put into the group he was in. They would put the newer ones with the more experienced ones so that they learned quicker that they're not in a place that's all rainbows and daisies.
It was workout time for his group. Some people were lifting weights, some were using the punching bags, some were doing martial arts, some were sparring, and so on. No one really played the normal sports like soccer or basketball, because what benefit would kicking a ball be when you're sneaking around a fully armed building for your target?
(For this one they're in Linnus, an organization of assassins. This group is training for combat.) -
I was using a ruler for art and I couldn't tell what the numbers said since I was confused. Turned out my ruler was flipped onto the wrong side and so the numbers were backwards.
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(I read some of this kinda love the vibe of it)
Brie walked into the training room. She was a bit nervous. She fiddled with her fingers waiting to be told what to do next. She wanted to try to be the best. but what if she couldn't be the best, There's no way to be the absolute best -
So considering that Harper is already in the training room you'd have to assume that she was running late. Why was she running late? Is she a new recruit?
Also remember to not get your commas and periods mixed up. -
Ok
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Mhm!
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Also, describe what the room she's walking into looks like. Does anyone approach her or confront her when she walks in?
There's all these details that are missing. -
Agreed.
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Ok.
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So try it again.
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Brie walked into a training room it had punching bags, weights, and a whole bunch of other things. A few people stared at her as her the newbie came in late. She smiled nervous her face red from running the whole way there trying not to be late.
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I'm new and just trying to make friends.
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No run-on sentences, ok? Make sure you put periods where there are supposed to be periods and commas where there's supposed to be commas.
Use some adjectives too. It makes the read more interesting. -
Well, welcome to GTQ, then!
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