divergent fanfics (tris lives!!!)
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Thread Topic: divergent fanfics (tris lives!!!)
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flounder101 NewbieBeep!! Beep!! Beep!! Beep!!
I roll over with a groan. Choosing day. We recived our aptitude test results yesterday. Mine were inconclusive. Abnegation; Euridite; Amity; Dauntless. I am divergent. I know how much danger I am in. The women who conducted my test - Tori she said her name was - stressed that point clearly enough she also mentioned how peculiar it was to have four factions as a result. The highest there has been was three. I am in more danger than anyone could have ever imagined. I find it stranger still that candor is the one faction i cannot survive in. Candor - where i was born andraised. Taught to understand their ways. However it makes more sense the more i think about it. It is human nature to protect yourself. People want me dead. How can i tell the truth about my divergence without being dead in 24 hours? -
flounder101 NewbieA knock on the door disturbs my thoughts.
"Bryony,"calls a voice who i instantly recognise as my sister, Thalia."You ha-have t-to get up. Its...Its choosing day." with a jolt to the heart i realise she is sobbing. I leap from my bed and practicaly sprint the short distance to the door, flinging it wide open and embracing my 14 year old sister. I lead her over to my bed and sit her down next to me, never breaking my hold on her. "Your tran-transfering aren't you?" she sniffed into my shoulder. I placed my hand under her chin so i could look her in the eye. I debated wether or not to lie yet decided against it she would be able to tell. And anyway it would crush her. She would watch me transfer later that day for there was no way i could stay. I looked into her kalidascope eyes - everchanging grey, green and blue. " It will be ok." I barely whispered. -
flounder101 NewbieOk guys, I know im new to this and all but. I have been working on this story for only god knows how long. I realise that not everyone likes the divergent triology but my plot is nothing like veronica's (no offence meant to veronica roth but why the f***ing hell would you kill your main character?) i am simply borrowing a few of her characters (and ideas) that will be met shortly!! I would also like to point out that my grammar and spelling is crap and i probably wont be the best at updating regularly but PLEASE GIVE THIS STORY CHANCE!!!
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flounder101 Newbie~ i promise i will post a REAL update later today.
Just so you all know Euridite did use Dauntless soilders to kill the majority of Abnegation in this sory but it is set 2 years later and everything is back to its original state. Jeanie and all who helped her are now factionless but jeanie is still suspected of giving most of the orders to Euridite. All the dauntless "gang" are still alive (tris tobias/four christina will marlene shauna ect) except Al who commited suicide during initiation after helping peter try to kill tris. Speaking of peter him drew and molly were all killed in the war. So now you are all fully updated i will start drafting the next REAL update.
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flounder101 NewbieSEE I SAID I WOULD UPDATE TODAY!!!!!
Soo, on with the story.
A fresh wave of tears streamed down her cheecks "Your le-leaving me j-just li-like meg-megan did. I-I'm going t-to have to st-stay here f-for another t-two years be-before I even ha-have a choice!"she wailed before racing out of the room. I sighed in defeat and slouched towards my en suite before undressing and stepping into the shower. Letting the burning hot water wash over my body. Something salty ran over my lips and i realised i.was crying. Megan was my older sister. One year older to be exact - she transfered to Euridite last year. The faction that wants me dead her new home, her new family, her new life. Thalia has never forgave Megan for transfering. Neither have I but we were never as close. When the water runs cold i step out of the shower and dress in the typical candor outfit, knowing that it would be the last time i ever wore it again.
Soooo, how was itl? Next update SHOULD be a little hapier. Love you guys x -
This is pretty good. XD
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flounder101 NewbieThank you!!!
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Thanks for the spoiler asshat.
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flounder101 NewbieI just want to say sorry for all the stupid 'author notes' so im gonna post another update *crowd cheers* thank you thank you silence please. By the way could you please leave a comment. Pretty pretty please i know i sound stupid but it makes my day. Thanks again for the comment Jinx Blackclaw
I walk downstairs and immeadiently wish I hadn't, my mother is sat at the table clutching a tissue like her life depended on it, her eyes red and watery and her nose running. My father stood behind her rubing comforting circles on her back. Thalia was nowhere to be seen. "Your transfering." said my fater and i was surprised to find that his voice craked. He said it as though it was a statment rather than a question yet i nodded anyway. My mothers sniffles became heart wrenching sobs but she managed to regain enough control to speak. "We will miss you dearly but I want you to know we love you no matter what you choose." I strode over to my mother and embraced her before turning to my father who had been watching in stony silence and traped him to in another embrace. -
flounder101 NewbieYour welcome geek
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Post this on WattPad instead.
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flounder101 NewbieI already post a seperate fanfic on wattpad so its easier for me to have my storys on two different sites so i dont post an update into the wrong story.
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flounder101 NewbieAnd again sorry for all theses posts that are not updates but i would like to say that i apreaciate CONSTRUCTIVE criticysm (no idea if thats spelt right) but i do not apreaciate people trying to change this fanfics plot. So if you dont like the way i write or some other stupid reason find yourself a f***ing new fanfic to read. I truly am sorry for all the nagging. I must seem like such an ass but i will try to post another actual update today. Please DO NOT KILL ME if i dont as i have had a project to finish by tommorow and a realy important test to revice for. Love you guys!! (except for the haters 'cos who the hell loves them?)
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Your fine but great writing though.
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flounder101 NewbieOk soo because I am flounder101 i have found time to give all you amazing people another update!! - it may not be the same quality as normal (in other words it might be crap) but i will try my best. Oh, and thank you for the comments Jinx.
~time skip to choosing ceremony~
I sit between my Mother and Sister. My Father on Thalia's right. I run my hands repeatedly over the velvety fabric of the chair, trying to calm my nevers. What was i going to choose? "Bryony Clearwater"called the booming voice of Marcus Eaton all to soon. I rose slowly to my feet. My heart was beating so fast it was amazing that it didnt burst right out my chest. As i walked past her, my mothers hand reached out and gave mine a reasuring squeeze "I love you"she whispered. Thats what broke me. My eyes fludded with tears. The exit looked so good right then. How i yearned to be able to turn and walk out of those doors. To leave and never come back. To never have to make this one choice that would change my life forever. Abnegation. Amity. Dauntless. Euridite. Am i selfless, kind, brave or smart? Those words ran through my head, over and over and over as i made my way down the steps and towards the platform where i would make the biggest decision of my life. I pressed the knife into my palm. Wincing slightly at the sharp pain. "I hate decisions"i thought bitterly. Selfless, kind, brave or smart. My blood dripped over the dauntless coals. I am divergent. Selfless, kind brave and smart. I will be dauntless.
So what do you guys think? As always please leave a comment. Next update initiation begins!! Love you guys x
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