Lost At Sea Pt 1 | Comments

It was pretty good; u should make part 2. But u should try to put more detail into your story so it's not short and quick to the point. I was a little confused in the beginning and it might also be best to write it in the description on who's POV (point of view) it is so u won't be confused as much.

This was great but seriously... same guys get both sisters, trunk opens at same spot, both fall into ocean... that part was dumb (no offense)

You have a good idea, but I agree with DaughterofApollo completely. Also, maybe add a love interest? That always makes for a good story.

Whoa her mom is really mean! She beat her up! But yeah with some work this could be pretty cool.

i was confused, but i did understand what was happening

I agree with DOA.

I agree with DaughterOfApollo.

LOVE IT!! * goes to read part 2 *

Part 2!

part 2

part 2!!!!!!!

OMG MAKE PART 2!!!! this is great you goot make part 2!