Characters
- Locked due to inactivity on Aug 4, '16 4:36pm
Thread Topic: Characters
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animefairy18 NewbieName: Akuma
age: 19
species: Half human, half fire pheonix
looks: Blak hair silver streak going down the middle, ice blue eyes with silver
personality: Shy and very mysterious -
animefairy18 NewbieName: leo Kaze
Age: unknown
Hair & eye color: pure silver and ice blue
Personality:agressive when family is in danger, cautious -
You need to put a proper personality into these, bubs, and like, a backstory as well. These are hardly characters at all, merely tropes or archtypes or something.
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animefairy18 Newbiebackstories r later after all the charaters have been posted and will b a seprate thread and they r a work in progress
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Why make a new thread for them? What's wrong with this thread?
And why even post the characters if they're not finished? I mean, I could literally s--- out seven of these 'characters' in ten minutes. No no, even better, I WILL s--- out seven of these 'characters' in ten minutes, start the clock.
Name: Amanda Jackboots
Age: 21
Hair & eye color: Black and Blue
Personality: Straight Edge and stereotypical Christian.
Name: Johnathon Kirks
Age: 34
Hair & eye color: Grey and Blue
Personality: Touchy about his hair, believes he's not that old. Grumpy
Name: Cat Parks
Age: 18
Hair & eye color: Blonde and hazel
Personality: Loves animals, she's a total animal fanatic. Painfully loyal
Name: Smith Olympia
Age: 23
Hair & eye color: Black and he has no eyes
Personality: Quiet and shy, but possessing a kind of inquisitive nature. To a certain degree of inquisitive. He's learned not to poke his nose in places he doesn't belong.
Name: Aaron Handsly
Age: 2
Hair & eye color: Bald and grey
Personality: Possibly the Anti-Christ. Loves to drool.
Name: Abdul Jafar
Age: 18
Hair & eye color: Brown and brown
Personality: Down to Earth and very realistic. Tries not to get his hopes up, but is always honest to his friends.
Name: Fast McDash
Age: 18
Hair & eye color: Rainbow and purple
Personality: Hates standing still. Is very arrogant and tries to push people towards doing their best as well.
Name: Anime Fairy
Age: Unknown
Hair & eye color: Unknown
Personality: Very immature. Thinks they're more important than they are. Wants simple gratification over actual hard work. Content with mediocrity.
Done. It took me exactly 6 minutes and 49 seconds. And, as you'll notice, none of these characters are unique in any way. They've barely got any personality. They're simply just archetypes, they don't mean anything, they have no distinguishing features what so ever. You need to put them in the context of a greater story, or else they're s---. You dumb broad.
And I swear to God, if you try to do something so dumb like give them a special race or different coloured hair and try to claim that makes them unique, I will personally hunt you down and drop a dead cat into your air conditioning. -
animefairy18 Newbiejust do me a favor and BACK OFF!!!!! like i said that i'm working on them okay just cut me some slack i'm still new at this
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animefairy18 NewbieLeo's bio: Leo lost his parents during a demonic war yet he has 2 sisters the names are Rena and Rouge sou
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Boy, that's...that's really worth all the time I spent waiting for a backstory. One whole sentence. That's efficiency right there. Mind if I ask a few questions?
Why do his sisters have a different last name?
So is Leo a demon as well?
What's childhood like for a demon? Are they created or are they raised?
What's demon culture like? Is it brutal or is it Earthv.2?
Where is parents involved in the war or were they simply casualties?
How did the three of them survive the war? Was this like the Diary of Anna Frank where they all hid in the cellar?
How long ago was this war?
How did it affect everyone else?
Wait, who was the war between? Was it between demons? Kingdoms? Modern Day countries?
Does Leo hate demons?
Where did your grammar and punctuation go?
See, a backstory is meant to explain a character. It's meant to expand the world, show what a characters been through and explain why they act the way they act. It's meant to make you care for a character and immerse the reader. But if you don't expand on anything you've said, then it doesn't mean anything. Leo's backstory is so vague that I don't even know what RACE Leo is. I don't even know what TIME Leo lives in. I know absolutely nothing about Leo other than the fact that he's cautious and lost his parents to demons, which I also know nothing about. For all I know, Demons in your story might be the equivalent of wolves and they just run around the woods eating caribou.
(Also, Anime, when we use numbers in writing, generally you want to actually write out the number. Using their numerical symbol is just lazy and looks bad.) -
animefairy18 Newbiei'm still working on it ok just give me some and sorry about snapping this morning and i will fix that okay IHLAOY i'm still new at this thing so i need time to figure what backgrounds for what characters
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animefairy18 Newbieand i will be more detailed for the background
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animefairy18 NewbieFor the story i'm writing it's about two villages are at war and both of these three characters are related and yes i will explain that when i post the story okay
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animefairy18 NewbieAnd Rena and Rouge are sisters and Leo doesn't realize that Rena and rouge are his sisters at all and yes the story is a work in progress right now i will post part of it later on and i will explain it
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Oh okay. Keep up the good work then.
Remember to use proper grammar and punctuation though. Those are very important in a story. -
animefairy18 NewbieWith Leo is part demon but his mother was an angel his father is a demon. The time Leo lives in is eighteen years after his parents died.I'll explain why Rena and Rouge have different names its's because their mother and father "Rena and Rouge's " parents are Leo's aunt and uncle but here's the twist Rena and Rouge's parents were raised in a different village than Leo was. I know this may be confusing and all.
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animefairy18 NewbieI will keep that in mind. Thanks for the advice.
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