I wonder if I'm a good enough poet to make this difficult
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Thread Topic: I wonder if I'm a good enough poet to make this difficult
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A window can be a very pretty thing
Yet, how so?
Is it the fact that it lets in wonderful sunlight that makes it pretty?
Or perhaps the stars that one can see at night
No, it must be the pictures one can draw on it as it fogs up
Yes, a window can be a very pretty thing
It can make pretty sounds
It can be an escape for some lost souls
Though still, this isnt what makes a window pretty thing
For it is not the sunlight that makes a window pretty
Nor the stars that shine at night
Surely it is not the pictures you can draw on it
And it is not the sounds it makes
Though the escape for the lost souls is a very good guess
Close! But no cigar!
For it is the horrible, beautiful, terrible, wonderful mess it can make when broken -
This is good! Can you let me know how mine sounds. I wrote this when I was in middle school.
What Do You See In Me?
What do you see in me?
Do you see a girl or a fiery light burning in me?
Do you see a girl in a corner or someone standing up for who she really is?
What do you see in me?
Do you see me as special or as someone scared to tell the world?
Do you see a girl doing whats right or a girl who goes into the world unprepared?
What do you see in me?
Do you see a girl in the dark or girl in the light?
Do you see a girl who cares or a girl that gives up who she really is?
What so you see in me?
Do you see me as a good friend or a bad enemy?
What do you see in me? -
Well, I was actually hoping to get feedback to see if anyone understood it, not another poem but whatever.
Yeah, that's pretty good. -
Yeah I get your poem and it actually sounds great. Have you wrote any more poems?
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What do you think it means then?
Yeah, but they're on my computer so I don't have them with me as of right now. -
Does it mean something like even the most beautiful things can be broken/are broken?
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No, that's not what I was trying to get at, but that's actually a really beautiful way to look at it Meg. ^-^
"It can be an escape for some lost souls." and then the last line about the mess. People cut themselves for an escape from life sometimes, and when a window breaks it has sharp edges well... yeah. I'm sure it explains itself now. -
Ohhhh okay. Got it now.
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Kk cool ^-^
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