Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

23% for my BNHA OC, Miwa Shimura.
SPOILERS AHEAD

She’s Shigaraki’s older sister by 5 years who was separated from him after THAT DAY. She was at summer camp when his quirk activated, so she survived. The HPSC took her in since she was Nana’s granddaughter, so they figured she’d make a good hero. She met Hawks when he was 7 and she was 10 and they became friends (since they were the only kids).

Flash forward to when she’s 25, Shigaraki’s running wild and All Might tells her he’s her brother. From then on, she’s convinced she’ll be able to fix him, and he doesn’t even know.

(She looks a lot like Nana, which makes All Might… bittersweet..?)

I got 10%, to be honest thats a little less I would have expected a little more. So her name is Leyla Fahmi, and she has a flower shop. She's also a Vampire in secret, in a world where Vampires get hunted down by the government. She's tall, lanky and is very thin, with very long hair that she mostly keeps in a braid. She's an escaped Vampire from the research centers and still tries to recover from what happened there. (Drug abuse, experiments). Well so there is this one usual customer of hers and they start talking very much and at least she is starting to get feelings for her. Comes out the usual customer, is a Vampire hunter but she doesn't finds out about Leylas real identity. Of course she won't confront her about it and keeps the lie up and of course it has consequences.

the sudden use of the r-slur was weird, could've just said mentally/physically disabled.

anywho, I feel like no one should use this quiz to determine whether or not ur oc is a mary sue. cuz the questions are vague and like OCS are complex and a quiz can't determine that perfectly. the questions themselves couldn't not perfectly aline with someone's OC to determine whether or not it's a bad character. i dunno it's just odd! mary sue is an outdated term from a time when the online art community was the most toxic. guys do what you want! have fun!

17%, not too bad.

Astrid is my original character for a book I'm writing. She starts off as 13, and in the end she's 14 (3 years older than me). She is a quiet Norweigan girl who has moved to Brooklyn, new york. My story takes place in 1968 - 1969. She knows only how to write in english, and thus is forced to communicate with others solely by notes on paper.

She falls in love with a rambunctious young girl named Elizabeth, and the two meet in secret every day underneath a filthy old stone bridge.

Around a year after meeting, Elizabeth discovers that it is illegal to be in a realashinship with the same gender. Infuriated - Elizabeth takes Astrid to a small gay bar on the corner of Christophers street.

Stonewall.

During the police raid that one fateful night, Astrid is killed. Pretty much the summary of my story. I am aware that nobody died at stonewall that night - this was just for the story.

I got 22%
I used my stranger things oc for this XD

Basically, she was Harry pottered to the Byers family and grew up with them, she always hated her dad because he was a drunkard, but her mum and her brothers were always there for her and,especially her brothers were ready to defend her against anything. She'd find metal and DND at a young age (about 10-11 years old) and was fascinated by it. Through this hobby she'd befriend Eddie and become part of his party, they'd go to all kinds of concerts and festivals together and have fun. At about 15 years of age she'd find out about her sexuality (she's a lesbian) and come out of the closet to Eddie, through that she'd find out that Eddie is actually gay. One day she'd take her brother home and they both go missing. While in the upside down she gets 'killed' by the demobats and wakes up as a vampire. She then finds her brother and tries to protect him, but through mysterious ways she gets pulled back into the normal world. There she tells everyone about the upside down, but the policemen think she's just so traumatized, that she imagines things. Her brother then gets found and she finds out, that she isn't the only vampire in the world. She's introduced to the brotherhood and they explain that she is a 'royal', which is because she wasn't turned by another vampire, but by 'bats of another world', and that she possesses a lot more power than the non-royals. She also now knows, that once she doesn't drink blood for a month, she falls into a 'bloodlust', which means that she can't control herself and her body anymore, and her instincts go wild. Now there's a lot in-between, which I haven't decided how to go yet, but after some time she gets abducted by the Russians and escapes by using her bloodlust against them. While all that she hides her powers and pretends like she can't control them, incase she needs to use them as a kind of 'suprise attack'. Her family then moves away while she stays with Eddie. Then season 4 happen

I got 15% for my original character, Aveline Mandel :)

Aveline was 5 years old, attending kindergarten at Castor Elementary, when her music teacher noticed she had a beyond-exceptional singing voice for her age. However, this same music teacher was involved in a large underground operation which abducted young children for talent-based experiments. Aveline was an easy target, so she was soon abducted. The organization then spent months traumatizing her into the point of disassociation, and restructuring her RNA so that she would completely forget her past aside from singing. After that, they spent five years tirelessly training her voice, so that it would be as perfect as possible. All of this was to evolve societys talents, and create a superior human race. When she was ten, one of the other children (academic talent) started a riot and escaped, helping Aveline and several other subjects escape. However, due to the neurological trauma the subjects suffered, they soon forgot and / or repressed the memories. Their life expectancy is also very short as a result of the experimenting. One day, in October, a group of detectives began searching for a series of suspicious missing children cases. There, they found Aveline and took her in.

15% don't even know if this is good or bad, maybe I should be more kind with my character.

So, his name is Jake Bellarte, a brazilian 15 years old who had his whole world turned around when at his 9 birthday he got a nice peek at the hidden world, the abyss is what he calls, supernatural entities, phenomenons and other things lurks in the darkests pits know to man and beyond, now he a baseline human (with just some spice to not make him die instantly) has to fight against the extinction of humanity with the SCP Foundation, no prophecies (only that the world will die), no easy ways, no kindness for human life. Jake was to make his way to save the maximum number of people he can. he will do with even lowering himself to the lowest of the lowest of scum, or doing unforgivable heresy, maybe his soul will burn for eternity in hell, but he WILL save his family and people from Earth from what is to come.

Is it cringe? Or overly Mary Sue? Don't really know, he does get some powers along the story, and the final he DOES become powerful as fu** (Not that he will be all-powerful, just strong enough to not die instantly to literal deities wanting to eat the Earth as a whole) He will lose people, he will lose many thing and gain others, if he will grown out of his past and accept what he has done? Now we will need to see.

And because I had to trim down for the limit-

He only got the hell out of his mom's house because at around 13ish, he sliced open his own arm and told the cops it was her doing, basically forcing CPS's hand after numerous attempts to get help from them. He eventually ran away in search of his dad, who turned out he was kidnapped from by his mother when she was deemed unfit to raise him. His father insisted took him in, encouraging his love of music for years. He was a loving parent to him, but he could never erase the years of hurt inflicted onto his son

Ricky loves his dad, but to a degree, still feels unworthy of him. Hard not to when for as long as you can remember, you were always told you weren't worth the ground you walk on.

Not only does he have his own mental health struggles that vary greatly from time to time, but his sexuality and keeping it out of the public's knowledge. Letting people find out could open him as well as his bandmates up to serious harm and hatecrimes. He is a gay man but it's much more difficult to hide when he suffers gynophobia and has a panic attack being NEAR a woman for less than half an hour. He tries hard to fake being straight at public appearances, but what people don't see is when he's sobbing in the bathroom for an hour because all he can picture is his mother and he feels like he's having a heart attack, terrified he'll wake up back in that house. They don't see how no matter how tough he acts, proclaiming that he doesn't need someone to 'tie him down,' that he longs for the intimacy his bandmates have with their girlfriends or wives. That he longs to just be normal.

They don't see when he's crying in the studio when everyone's gone because he feels like a complete failure in life even when he's made it to the top. They don't see how he never considers himself truly happy, or being worthy or being able to be happy..

Depressing character, yeah I know. He's difficult to explain, does way better in roleplay where you can

27% Doesn't seem too bad to me. I honestly just wish I wasn't as scared at the thought that my oc might be a mary sue so she could be a bit spicer ;w;

I used a JSAB OC, Trinity Blossom, who basically came into existence from a glitch in the shape-making matrix. Basically, all the shapes are "born" from the Tree of Life as lifeless shapes that contract color from the environment around them.(kinda like ponies and cutie marks lol) Something had went wrong while Trinity was being made, and instead of being a heart , she looked much more human, with a birth mark shaped into a heart on her cheek. She got her color from cherry blossoms that were on the trees at the time she was made, so she has lightly-pink tinted skin, and magenta colored hair. And most shapes are born with shapeshifting powers or weapons too, but of course that glitched, resulting in her being able to form into a small creature with wings, but not being able to control her form. She's clueless as f---, since she knows little to nothing about the world, so she has a very positive outlook and a bubbly personality. She's stuck in a war between corrupts and pures, so she's kinda the push-me-pull-me toy, because no one really knows what side she's on-

So yeah- this is my smol babey-

I got 23%. Considering that my OC in the MHA world (kinda) I'm surprised. I'm working on a animation channel visual novel with my Oc's from MHA called "The Sane Asylum" and I wanted him to be one of the main characters

His names Tokyo Ouma. He has Long brown hair, Green eyes, blue contacts, short, 14-20 though out the story, Mexican/Japanese, Light skinned, and acts like a kid. Imagine Togas quirk but he can only copy quirks and if he has it for to long he will instantly pass out.

He's in a testing asylum under a hospital for his past actions in high school (Killing his close friend). The only family member he has problems with is is father, he's a real mommy's boi tho. He's rude causes he's trying to keep his guards up and keeping his 'Hero' rep.

I just give him a oversized hoodie and pants with a body full of scars and came up with my first child I've ever loved <3

I got a 21%, which isn't bad, especially since the character I did this with is a fan character. Her name is Jorii Aoki, and she's a Jojo oc who is Jotaro's cousin. Not gonna write her whole story out, but basically one of Dio's assassins kills her parents and kidnaps her sister, so she goes with the crusaders to Egypt. Her Stand's name is Material Girl and it's basically just tactical glitter. Its ability is to make anything it covers as hard as diamond, and we all know that diamond is unbreakable. *gets ran over by a bus for making that awful joke*

I got 42%

Honestly, its understandable and I accept the fact that its a high percentage. My character is 15 and come from the year 3046 that time travels to the attack on Titan time line to change it. I would but also wouldnt say she has ptsd, because shes gotten so used to the experiments and murderes.

When it comes to relationships, no one fails for her and she doesnt fall for anyone, which I enjoy because thats what attack on Titan is somewhat about, there isnt time for relationships.

Levi being a popular character, I did make it so she saves Levi and Kuchel, but she looks at them like family and nothing more, she becomes close to young Erwin, but Erwin never falls for her and shes just using him to become his right hand man when Erwin becomes a commander.

The only relationship shell ever create with the characters are becoming their friends but also being that thorn in the ass for the trio main characters.

Shes quite strong and she has around a bit more strength than the ackermans, but she still gets injured.

I took this test because I honestly thought I made my character too much of a Mary Sue, and I accept and agree with the percentage, I take criticism and if you have any for me Id enjoy to take it in and change my character to make her less of a Mary Sue.

I got 16%

My character is MHA fan oc called Kumiko hisa (first name is Kumiko) so you might not understand if you haven't seen the anime. Yurei is an alias she uses throughout the story.

*=start of backstory and end

*She the daughter of the pro hero Spiriter (another oc) and a cop. She was a late bloomer with her quirk and I mean a LATE bloomer since she didn't get her quirk until she was 11. She was a joyous, loud child before finding out she was a late bloomer. After that she became rather reserved so her classmates wouldn't question her about her quirk. Her family life was stable until an incident. She had gotten her quirk which is a combination of her parents quirk which I will have to explain. Her mom's quirk called spirit allows her to have the appearance or abilities of a dead person or animal so if she uses a cheetah she can run really fast. Her dad's quirk is exchange so whatever he touches he can turn it into something else. So whatever Yurei touches will turn into an animal or object of her choice. A few month later she joined some classmates doing some vigilante s--- cause they think they are so strong and can be a hero. Basically hero killer is in the area and a run in with him equals traumatic experience for Yurei. Her quirk has a sort of energy bar that decreases each time she uses it and when it gets to zero she gets exhausted and bruised/cuts will appear on her body. She is at her limit and yells at stain (so smart-_-) to distract him from a class mate. Scars are left and stain let's them live cause they are vigilantes not really heroes or even heroes in training. Family finds out and Yurei is no longer allowed to be a hero cause it's way to dangerous for someone with no experience with their quirk. She runs away to pursue her dream and ends up working all kinds of jobs at 16 while lying about her age using her quirk to look like someone else. A teacher at ua witnesses her help protect some civilians in a villain attack and nezu is nezu helping her

I got 23% his name is Stephen and he has a mental disorder that his lover tried to force him to get help for it. He tries too get therapy and it doesn't work, he gives up and stops going. The only reason he got help is because his lover tried to get him to. Anyways he eventually ends up trying to murder his boyfriend (caused by him not getting help) but his boyfriend chokes him to death before he can murder him, the relationship was toxic mostly from Stephen, but also a little from his boyfriend. Stephen was more physical and emotional, and his bf was toxic emotionally. His bf got depression and anxiety caused by Stephen, and after his death he got ptsd as well. Basically it's a story about two guys one angry and pessimistic and one optimistic and Stephen makes the other become more like him, to the point when he has to kill Stephen.

I got a 23% for a fan fiction character which is honestly pretty good- Im not going to explain who he is or what hes a fan fiction of but hes a short-tempered hot-head who is protective of his friends, and has a sweet side. (Basically, the traits of his parents combined)

21%

Hes a new character who hasn't been fully developed yet

His name is Maru, an 11 year old boy with a twin named Mafu. I took the isekai trope from anime and used it for them.

Maru is a bit of a pushover and is terrified of the isekai world. His only trauma is from his parents kicking him and Mafu out very violently.

At one point he was seperated from his brother and taken in by this man to fight off monsters. Yeeyee

17% Mary Sue- thought it would be worse

His name is Max Evens, it starts out with him in grade 9, normal looking kid, blond hair, blue eyes, many freckles(dont take that statement lightly) He has a high interest in the arts. music, drama, dance are his main focuses.

I wouldnt consider his back story tragic, his parents are divorced as are over 50% of American parents. Max lives with his John his dad and his sister Rebecca who is 2 years older then him. He and his sister visit their mom once a week one Wednesday.

In the summer of his grade 9 year, Max decides that he needs a change so the classic cutting of the hair. Little back story about this, his girlfriend Nicole, now ex. Told him he was bland and boring. So he as it suggests he became the opposite of bland and boring. No yes this could be viewed as negative, the character changing him self just because someone said so. Now yes it did start out like that but he actually enjoyed the person he was becoming, he was braking out of his shell in a way.

Btw, the style he chose was punk, Mohawk, leather jacket, the whole shabang

Idk, always thought he seemed like a Mary Sue. But as long as your character has flaws and some normality to them they wont be to Mary Sue. If you struggle with things like this, look at people you know, look at their flaws and back storys, it will give it more realism.