Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

The OC I used for this quiz is Shiro Akawaito. He is a human with natural white hair and red eyes (In his world weird colored hair and eyes are normal.) He is 14. His nationality is Japanese (kinda did that because I wish I was Japanese ;-;) He is not a fan character. I don't have much for his backstory, but I do have a start. By the way, his backstory was based on the urban legend "coin locker baby" and the song by Maretu of the same title.

Shiro was the result of an accidental pregnancy. His mother was not ready to take care of a child yet, she wasn't prepared. She couldn't get an abortion because he was too old, so she just let him be born. She couldn't put him up for adoption either because the local adoption center only accepts children 3 months and up, and she wanted him gone immediately, so she quickly devised a plan. His mom took the train back from the hospital. When she arrived at the train station, she stuffed him in a coin operated locker, hoping someone would find him and take care of him. Now it'd be a boring story if that was where it ended, wouldn't it? So.. he survived!! Yay!

He had utilized a power that he'd never known he had until then. This power allows him to hibernate, shutting off his needs and preserving his body until he decides to wake up. He automatically went into hibernation mode when he was put into the locker. He escaped by waking up and lockpicking, which happened when he was 5. Realistically, someone would've found him earlier, but the locker was jammed shut from the outside and no one bothered to repair it because plot convenience. Idk the rest yet.

I got 21%, but I would've gotten higher if I would've been able to go into detail. Oh well.

I got 23%

I did this for my fan made oc Sinobu which is a MHA oc. His ability is shape shifting. With his shape shifting some limitations are 1)same eye color 2) in all forms except fox if held for to long he can not turn back without the help of a potion.

He is Aizawas adopted child along with my friends oc. Due to his past he has ptsd (I do try to make the symptoms appear) which hinder him in fighting. Like me he is more interested in herbs than fighting, so he wants to become a side kick that can use its magic to help others (example a foxes tounge is sharp enough to help clean wounds) and also help with rescue missions. Due to his ability to turn into small creatures, going into small places would be easier. Due to his PTSD certain situations can be tramactic that would be fine for others (keep in mind I mainly only role play with this character). Also he tends to lose his human mind even in fox form and end up causing a lot of trouble. He tries to move forward, but sometimes it's hard.

I'm still working more on him so any suggestions is fine by me

I got 7%.

Some info about the character: His name is Linaere, one of the 2,000 people housed on a space station called Station Ianno. (Not a fan character, original universe although heavily based off of The 100). He has a very lightly brown skin tone, greasy black hair, and is about 6'2. He is 21 years old, and was a guard trainee on the station. However, his commander decided to send him down to earth with the other 1,000 (There are 5 stations, 200 was sent down from each.). He tried to protest, but on the day of the Ground Calling, he was sent with them anyways. He and Freya (another guard trainee sent down) used their skills in survival and fighting methods to promote the survival of the 1,000. Eventually, he almost died from a rough winter illness that they called Yellowthroat, due to the yellow-ish mucus that they would cough up. It was, in fact, an uncontrolled case of the influenza.

33% Mary Sue, I expected my character would be average to little be mary sue lol.

My OCs name is Willow, shes 20 and twice my age Oof- But shes my height, 53. With purple eyes and grey-purple hair, one of her eyes covered by a bandage. She looks pretty androgynous now that I gave her a more original appearance.

I started her off by using someone elses character design. I know, I copy :( but I did give credit of course, then as time went on I gave her more original decor on her outfit, etc. It started off with a witchy small young adult to a dapper looking fine young lady. I kept the witch hat cause I liked it.

She has quite the name for herself, practically despised by her fellow hometown, etc. Willow mostly isolating herself in the dark, her powers are out of her control. Using Deltarune/Undertale references for her, its HATE. ;)

Shes decently attractive, thats all I can say.

Yeah this is my OC who I made since November 2018. Hope you like this soul reaper smol girl.

My Oc I used here is called Quinton Williams, hes a 26 year old investigative detective with Aspergers, depression, anxiety, and a few other mental problems due to some past trauma that heavily relates and impacts him in the story and is a key component to character growth.

Hes from Kansas and grew up on a farm, along with training for his detective role, so hes well built and pretty toned, he maintains this by training regularly and walking his dogs. Hes very unkept and looks messy but hes a pretty good looking guy, hes got freckles beauty marks and scars littering his body, hes also covered in bruises and other injuries because he bruises easily and doesnt really care.

Hes very unkept and doesnt really care about his appearance, and doesnt take care of himself, he has scruff, bags under his eyes, and his hair is a mess. He relies on caffeine for his day and occasionally finds himself drinking alcohol. He takes meds for his issues. Hes socially awkward, as in he has trouble functioning correctly around people unless theyre super close. He gets hyperfixated on things easily and says really weird and awkward things in attempts to be funny or relatable, which leaves him nowhere.

He also has some other personal issues that are spoilers to my story.

His bf/husband is a dude named Damien, whos the opposite of him. Damien is super well kept, flashy, rich, confident and well liked. Theyve been friends for about a decade and a half and Quinn is the only person Damien became close with due to strictness with his dad and an inferiority complex with his sister

Right, so I got 27% so I might as well describe them.

My OC is a self insert, made to represent myself in my YouTube videos and roleplays. Her name is Mud and she's about 6'7, from head to hoof. Her legs are a deer's, and she has a black bushy tail. She's extremely skinny with a flat chest (my body type) and mostly wears an oversized batman t-shirt accompanied by a yellow, leather collar.

She has pale skin and freckles, and her hair is light orange. Her hair is extremely curly and is worn in a ponytail. One of her eyes is black with a hazel, heartshaped pupil, and the other is hazel with a black heartshaped pupil. She's filled with bees, and because of that became a walking beehive and cannot feel pain.

Some of the non-self insert properties, is that she's a creation of a super prestigious demon family. Mud's cannon name is Moss, and she works as a servant for the family. She had raised almost all of the family's children. Moss was created by Kiru to be overly powerful. He took the properties of the most dangerous animals on earth and put them together.

Most of Moss' obstacles are stemmed from her mental state. She's terrified of failure, and gets attached to people way too easily. She has a rather childish personality, and often says things without thinking that makes people dislike her easily. Moss is also really stubborn and doesn't like accepting help or anything like that.

23%, huh? Might as well make a short description of my OC Ninetails. She's a Ninetales from Pokmon, but I changed her name to avoid confusion with other Pokmon of her species. We're talking about a Kanto Ninetales, btw. She has fire powers only. As a Vulpix, she was caught and treated well by her trainer. But he soon became abusive and started feeding her less and less, making her starve, as well as forcing her to evolve and to learn the moveset she has now: Flamethrower, Quick Attack, Confuse Ray and Mystical Fire. After many attempts of trying to survive, Nine was abandoned by her trainer. Slowly learning to live on her own and the bruises she had healing.

But despite all of this, she'll never stop having faith in humanity and Pokmon and will do anything to protect her loved ones!

Your character is 27% a Mary Sue! 27%

Original characters at this level could probably take a bit of spicing up, but fan characters are probably pretty good. Please remember that the traits listed in this test are not in themselves bad but can be bad when added up. I am not trying to bash your character.

The character in question is my OC, Olive Wyatt Lich. She's goblin and half human. When in the transformation to full goblin form, her hair changes from reddish brown to ginger. She has natural red eyes that are like a cat (in slits, can see in the dark.) The whites around the eyes turn yellow when going full goblin. Her freckles enlarge into medium sized spots on her moss green skin. She's 25 years old. She's orphaned, adopted by her two mothers. She's a triplet. Her sister, Izzy, caused the scar across the bridge of Olive's nose. She's from a whole different universe, which explains why she's part goblin. When meeting the goblin king, she becomes knighted. Her Mother, Amaris, aided and abetted to Aunt Kyrie who happened to be a major wreaker of havoc. They had to flee from the world they were originally from by time hopping to a different universe. They have to stay hidden from the spies on Earth. Ace Neve Quinnton, one of the top dog spies, was sent to track down Olive and her family. But then he got attached and now is defending them from the High Council. Ace ended up getting blackmailed by Izzy and is also conspiring with her and the most dangerous criminal in Ulysses, Praxidike. Many more things happened with my other characters relating to Olive, but that will make a novel of a comment on here if I type any longer.

Glad she's not too much of a Mary Sue.

My OC Donny is 26% a Gary Stu. The quiz said he could take some spicing up.

Here is a quick summary of him:

He is not a fan character, he is from an original story and one day when he was very little a sketchy man came up to his parents door and offered to buy him for $10,000 for a medical trial. His parents accepted the offer. The doctor said he would be brought back to his parents soon and unscathed but that did not happen.

At the lab, they did lots of experiments on him, they tried to figure out the reason behind his immortality (which he was born with) by various methods, they tested medicines on him but their biggest project was trying to turn him into means of psychological warfare.

They ended up giving him brainwashing powers which would give him the ability to make others develop schizophrenia, but the only downside was that he had schizophrenia himself. (This would probably not work in our universe but his universe has different science, psychology and physics.)

He was in the lab until he was 15 and then he escaped through a tunnel in the ground he had been carving since he was 5. He ran away from home instead of going back because his parents were neglectful and abusive (well duh the literally SOLD him) 1/2

I got a 29% !! Honestly, I was kind of scared that Ryuu would be around 50% or so, but 29% isn't all that bad! He's a fan OC from the series Danganronpa, and is the ultimate Vampire (thus why I thought his score would be higher) I can't send his entire biography, but basically his past was that he'd constantly get kicked out of all the homes he lived in due to him being a vampire, so he doubted who he was for a long time! The reason everybody hates him is because of his overly nice persona he displays as to not be hated. That persona of course failed, but he still displays it. Also he has pastel pink hair, red eyes, and he wears formal clothing so AHJKJHAJKAJ

I got 19% Mary Sue for mine. I thought it'd be higher, but it could certainly use more character building. My character is Eggplant Man, who is from an alternate reality where a flabby bioengineer named Lord Nuggets used a giant weapon in a spaceship to alter everyone's DNA, which in turn ended up either giving people superpowers, or transforming then into some anthropomorphic creature, or even both, in some cases. Eggplant Man was subject to the former. He's an impulsive 17-year-old who's real name is Chris Cross, and his family ditched him for a vacation they never returned from, so he's been taking care of himself for a year. He took on the name Eggplant Man when Lord Nuggets' (now called Chickpanuggets due to being transformed into a bird by his machine) machine gave him the ability to summon deadly eggplant-themed weapons. In appearance, he is a tall, thin boy with black hair and teal eyes. After gaining his unique abilities, he started wearing a purple, green, and yellow costume to solidify his superiority, but since everyone had been genetically modified, they gave him no heed. As a result, Eggplant Man has started trying to do everything and always doing the first thing that comes to mind so he can gain attention.

But then again, very little of what I just wrote is even a selectable option.

I got a 19% which isn't to bad, she's a bit older than me by at least 5 years though she doesn't have a specifically set age seeing as how i use her an awful lot for role-plays. Yes she's an 'experiment' (i know so original, but hear me out). She was artificially created, they wanted to see how far they could push it and create 'super humans/weapons' and of course created a few animals in the process. you cant jump straight to humans in most cases. She owns one of these animals, a cat names calypso. The cat has the parasyte vibe for those who know the manga and anime. Basic description of the cat is well it's normal cat at first glance green eyes dark brown fur little white patches or spots, pretty nice looking cat till it opens 5 eyes and it's tail splits into 2 bone blades and starts talking more or less. Over all though still a cat and it has a very limited understanding of language.

Dachi is a red head with hazel eyes but they do change colors. Specifically her whole eye turns to a static sort of silver color when she's singing. (mostly because it's pretty fun to color in my refs for her and she's a siren. Some how they managed to get siren DNA, mythological creatures and demons are pretty common in the rps i use her in so it isn't to far fetched And since she's in predominately magical worlds and a siren she does have the whole thing where she gets to wet she suddenly has no longer has legs and is stuck with fins till she dries off. Which sucks since she's constantly getting shoved into pools, ponds, sprayed with water guns, and or just getting drenched in water by the other characters just because they can really. She was behind in the development part of her child hood walking wasn't to far behind normal but she never said a single word till she was 7. (First word was 'fries' which she literally screamed after stealing someones french fries and dropping them when she tripped) She's near sighted and needs to wear glasses, though she rarely does because she

Hm, 23% eh. I get it really, but most of my answers were a yes and no most of the time. Sort of.

Just to be clear, my oc is called Leo, fairly small kid younger then me, seems about ten but is twelve due to lack of sun and nourishment. Brown greasy hair uncut for most of the time I have had him and just slightly looks like a girl a little bit.

Now for the yes and no questions, usually related to powers or some unbelievable power up. Now first things first. The guy's hella weak as weak can get! Remember when I said he looks two years younger then if he should? That's not due to him being cute but dangerously thin and frail, his little muscles aren't going to win any fights anytime soon.

But then that leads to his...complicated abilities. He has the ability to have his soul exit his body to a invisible astral form, and can take control of someone's body if they are in any way thinking or close to death he is either gets kicked out after about a minute or two or just leaves and automatically is reverted back into his inhabited but alive body. Now for context of story, Leo ain't a smart guy, can't talk and just sort of trusts everybody, but not in a good loveable way where he convinces everybody to be his friend.

Leo lives in a pretty damned world, a slight too edgy do my tastes actually. Constantly on end exploited and overused and manipulated powers known or not, the story revolves around odd jobs he does under many different types of philosophy and influences from other people while getting a little bit of cash for essentials in a diplomatic world.

Think Kino's journey, but everybody is a bad guy. As for mental illnesses go, I sure as heck don't know anything about them, but Leo's lack of common sense and speech is constantly a problem and we all know his lack of pecs.

Seriously though, because if my mostly yes and no answers, can anybody review my short was bad summary of my decent character. One of my first oc's by the way, still new to all this.

My character is a falcon harpy named Cass (Cassiopeia). She is from my comic series “Light Weilders”. She currently has only met my deer-centaur, Vincent, but becomes a valuable member of the team. The story takes place in a world where races like elves, harpies, lamias, wilds (people who can turn into animals), etc. are common, and humans are rare. She also has only one power. She can shoot these sharp feathers from her wings, but she can’t go rapid-fire or the will cut into her arm. They also cause her to not be as fast of a flier. She has warm skin, brownish black hair, and bright blue eyes. Her clothes are a bit tribal but still contemporary in her realm. Also she can easily wear them because the shirt is sleeveless and simply ties around the neck. Is this OC ok? Should I spruce her up a bit? I got 19% Mary Sue

My character got 10%. Had it been 10 years ago when I first created her, her Mary Sue level probably would have been a lot higher. Her name is Arisa Riddle, she's a character from an original story I'm still working on. It's based on Alice in Wonderland, but an alternative take on it. She's a 16 year old girl, with decently nice looks, well-mannered, has a sharp mind, but is also rather submissive and has some anxiety problems. However, I wanted to make Arisa as realistic as possible so she can feel relatable to other girls her age. Especially nerdy girls or the ones with social issues.

Although she has a rather sad past, it's a key plot point to help shape her into the person she grows to be. She had a rocky relationship with her strict parents since she was a child. They were both successful doctors with busy careers, so they often neglected their own daughter and only showed interest in her grades (and be harsh to her when she didn't exceed their expectation). When she was about 7, her parents were planning on divorcing and were fighting on who would take in Arisa. On the same night, all 3 of them got into a car accident and only Arisa survived. Eventually her much more loving uncle and aunt adopted her, but she still blamed herself for not being the perfect daughter her parent's wanted her to be. So she locks away the things about her she deemed "flawed" and dedicated the rest of her childhood being a model student/daughter, in order to not to be unwanted by her new caretakers.

Years later, at 16 years old, Arisa and her guardians are moving to a new area when their car suddenly breaks down in the middle of the road. She notices a strange red cat in the area and chases after it into the woods when it steals an important item from her. There she runs into a strangely dressed young man, with white skin and hair, as well as red eyes (and a pair of rabbit ears and a tail). He literally drags her into a cave where they are teleported to a world called "Wonderland".

15%!

Gideon's an NPC character from the game Stardew Valley.

He moved to Pelican Town as soon as he turned 18, which I suppose I want him to be in his early 20s, so we'll say he moved around the same time Elliott came along.

Gideon was adopted into the family after the eldest sister died, and while he wasn't originally supposed to totally replace her(Teagan and David, his adopted parents, say that his adoption had nothing to do with her death, but that's definitely a lie), but that didn't stop them from sort of subconsciously pressuring him into fitting into her picture Be a teacher! Learn harmonica! Be the quiet, quirky boy! He's the kind of person who's more in the in-between when it comes to feminine and masculine, so I would like I eventually excuse that as part of his parents' confusion. Also, in his story, it's canon that the only reason he dyes his hair(brown to yellow) is to further distinct him from the dead girl, Masha.

His adopted brothers are twins Oscar and Ethan, and Oscar just sort of pities Gid for his situation(Don't get me wrong, they have loving parents, but they have made their mistakes while raising Gid) while Ethan seems to blame Gid for what happened to Mash.

As for his personality, Gideon's really happy-go-lucky and boyish(naive, playful, curious) traits make him really friendly with, like, everyone in Pelican Town. Of course he does have his insecurities(no thanks to his parents) and there are the moments when they decide to wreck him, full force. He can also be sort of a pushover, so he could never really voice his discomfort, when around his parents.

His friends are Sam(they talk, but aren't super close), Alex(Gid actually kinda crushes on him, and they can also kind of relate to eachother about discomforts with their families), and Robin(he sees her as a motherly figure alongside Teagan, thoouugh does kind of choose to ignore how she is with her own kids).

I dunno if there's much else to say? Uahh, he has a pet chameleon named Ron, i

18% lol

The oc i tested was Sunny. He's 11. Hes a ghost, but he lost all his memories with the moment when he died. He doesnt remember his name, he took the nickname sunny from something (not sure what exactly yet) he finds in his Old room, where he appears when he becomes a ghost. IT seems like his parents havent been here in a long time. Later he finds a person who he thougt was his friend, but in fact was one of the Kids who bullied him.

About his personalisty, hes really shy and quiet, because every time he tried to speak up, he was silenced by the Kids in his enviroment. He has claustrophobia(if thats how you spell it).

Now his backstory. he doesnt remember even a bit, but hes going to be having moment when he remembers bits of his life as a human. He was a normalna kid, liked Animals and had a good relation with his parents. The only bad thing was that he wasnt really liked by any Kids because of his extreme clumsiness and bad memory, which made him forget important things. There was also a Group of Kids who were jealous of his stuff (his family was Rich) and spread fake rumors about him. His parents always said that its not as bad as he says, that hes Just overthinking and told him to stop exaggerating. Then he died in a car accident when he was going by bus with his grandma(who also died) to the hotel in which his parents stayed at that time.( they went went there before the end of the shool year and sunny was staying with his grandma, and when the shool year ended he was supposed to join his parents)In fact, his parents were actually important among the underground organization which was gathering all the supernatural beings and all the ''gifted" humans, that means with some sort of a suprhuman abilty(30% of humans on Earth). Sunnys parents were told to introduce him to the organization, cause he was given a tak. To explain, every week in Every country there are two People cosen to fulfil a tak within three years, which is usually defeating some criminal o