I think my prolgue is too short
- Locked due to inactivity on Aug 4, '16 4:20pm
Thread Topic: I think my prolgue is too short
-
Here it is so far:
The town of Hawkswing is ablaze, women and childrens screaming fill the air. The young elf can only watch as her town is engulfed by black smoke and red flames. Her family trapped inside their home, clawing at the doors as smoke and fire wrap around the house. The timber beams falls from the ceiling landing on them, crashing them. The young elf hears them scream as they suffocate, she grasps her pointed ears as she tried to block out the screaming. The fire jumps from thatched house to thatched house, the orange glow from the scorching town can be seen from all around the kingdom. The fire leaps onto the floor and starts to surround the elf. It crawls up around her. She pants as the intense heat surrounds her. The red fire flickers, it turns as black as the night sky and swallows her whole.
Anyone? -
*prologue
-
I think its fine. Maybe you might wanna mention the elf's name? And where she is? Otherwise, its a great prologue! :)
-
Ok thanks!
This thread is locked, therefore no new posts can be made.
