Some More Poems
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Winter
The winter had come,
This known as your snowflakes began to fall,
Fall from the sky in heavy swirls,
In the ravaging wind,
Only to land gently,
And merge calmly
It will snow once again
My winter is yours;
Your wind blows me away,
Your snowflakes flood me,
Your coldness haunts
You have frozen,
I am becoming cold,
How I long for you to finally melt -
Very good... personally, I don't think it's your best poem, but it's still really good.
(I still like your Summer one best) -
I really like it. Its good
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awesome
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Do you really?
'Summer' was rather incomplete to be honest.
Would you like to read the 'improved' and completed version, and tell me what you think of it? -
Yes, very much :)
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A Memory of Summer
A new morning had come,
The gentle rise of the golden sun,
Its rays delicately poised;
Through the windows of home,
They are bright bars, laden with twirling dust,
With magical enticement,
Of endless thought
Pure was the aqua sky,
Its clouds finally asleep and away
A midst, a lone bird, happily lost
Under the shade of our tree,
Its leaves swayed,
They swayed gently,
And through it, the suns glimmering dots
Scattered upon me
The bright star in the aqua sky,
How it shined upon the land and upon the people;
Freely and lovingly
It had finally come:
The brightest star in aqua sky,
It had shone,
How bright it had shone upon me,
Freely and lovingly;
Just for me -
OMG they are WoNdErFuL!!!
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AMAZING! Summer is DEFINITELY my favorite so far...
Great work, Leah. Abosolutely, positively amazing!
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nice leah
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Thank you everyone, so so much!
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With your talent you could make a poem book
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Awesome! =)
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