I'm tired
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Thread Topic: I'm tired
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I'm tired of people and their need to swear.
All this stupid negativity is hard to bare!
I'm tired of people who don't care!
I'm tired of all the bullies on the bus.
I'm tired of people thinking they're better than us.
I'm tired of all this drama, chaos, and fuss.
I'm tired of people calling me a puss.
I work harder than anyone I know.
But that doesn't stop my emotions being kicked like snow.
I'm tired of people who refuse to grow.
I'm tired of people who grow too fast.
I'm tired of people needing a blast.
I'm tired of thinking about my rough past.
I'm tired of hearts as cold as ice!
I'm tired of people who refuse to be nice.
I'm tired of people being treated like rodents, like mice.
I'm tired of all this negativity and need to be rude.
I'm tired of people who like others nude.
I'm tired of people who always intrude.
Why can't people love, live...
And learn to give?
Learn to forgive?
Learn to be kind?
I've spoken my mind.
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Do you guys like the poem? It's based off a very true story.
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If youre tired then, rest.
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Yes, it makes me remember how much humans suck, which I think about a lot anyway.
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Terrible poem.
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I think I will rest.
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where is the punchline
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It's a very good poem, reminds me of my life more or less school life
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garbo
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That poem is so Lit! That basically explains my life
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Roleplayatronic NewbieAlright, so let me give some constructive criticism:
This is more of a rhythmic/entertaining poem than what i assume you intended to be a serious poem. Rhyme poems are made for entertainment, but poems that are neatly organized with a detailed meaning is better for a serious problem poem. The meaning is well but the rhyme makes it seem more playful than adult.Being kicked by snow? That makes no sense whatsoever. I get what you mean and you needed a work to rhyme with but...
Seriously?
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I said being kicked like snow. People kick snow without thought.
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I like that comparison actually^
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