I am writing a story. Help me!
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Thread Topic: I am writing a story. Help me!
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The main character is Holly Jorge. She is 14 years old. The rest of the characters are James McKinley, 12 years old, Alexander Kolkin, 18 years old, Hannah Priss, 7 years old, Natasha Falls, 36 years old, Victor Falls, 40 years old, Cynthia Rowle, 10 years old, and Simon Eeton, 29 years old. The first sentence is: In the morning, at 7:00 a.m., young 14-year-old Holly Jorge tended to the 7 horses and 2 ponies in the stables.
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Lolz1000 NoviceA light took over Holly then she was transported to the magical land of Manou.
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James woke up from a dream.
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Infinity 1000 NewbieThen a light took over James and he was transported to another part of Manou.
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Hannah ran out the house because the door was unlocked and she accidentally fell into a fountain.
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Holly finds out she is not normal. She has cancer and she can't afford to go to the doctor so she stays away from school because she doesn't want others to catch her cancer and then her best friend catches it and dies??? Her mind is full of sadness until she finds the love of her life who is rich and nurses her back to health and helps her through her guilt. Sorry it's bad I just thought about it at the top of my head.
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Not to entirely butt in, but that plot makes no sense. Cancer is a terminal disease and it is non-contagious, since it deals with the multiplication and extreme overgrowth of cells in your body. So that plot already flops on its own.
Unless that wealthy "love of her life" has perfect medical credentials to deal with her life-threatening disease and catches it before it gets into a serious stage, then yes, maybe he can "nurse her back to health". But if she just leaves it off like that, then the disease can worsen and decrease her survival rate, even if treatment could be afforded. -
not to also entirely butt in but drew is actually correct ?? i had a relative who passed away of cancer not too long ago and that is.... not how cancer works sorry...... please, if you're gonna soap about cancer at least do it correctly or not at all, thanks -
Let me try to start off this story.
Holly walked out to the stables as the first rays of sunlight filtered through the trees that surrounded the house. She was excited to tend to the ponies. They had been her source of escape for the past couple of days. See, Holly wasn't like most people. She had been adopted by a loving family, and had caring friends.
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Holly was a special girl but she didn't want to be seen as "special". Her sort of special she felt was a curse, a curse were people smother her in love and care to much for her liking. But the Pony's didn't know she was special and she liked that. The pony's were instead special to her because it gave her a escape.
She was sick everyone knew that, but sometimes deep down she wished the people who love and care for her wouldn't treat her so special. -
Jellycupcake NoviceShe climbed on her favorite pony, Lucy, and galloped away into the forest.
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