Alright this is a story im writing
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Thread Topic: Alright this is a story im writing
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Our story begins on a warm summer night in a basement laboratory, were a young girl's life will change forever in the blink of an eye. The girl was te years old. she had blond hair, azure blue eyes, tan skin, and looked a bit tall for her age. she wore a small night gown and she was barefoot. In front of her was her father who had brown hair, brown eyes, and pale skin like a vampire. He stood about 6'4 and wore a white lab coat, a worn pair of pants, and an old pair of white tennis shoes. His eyes looked like he hadnt slept in weeks. the girl looked a her father in worry untl his voice snapped her back to reality.
"Sweetie," aid her father in a soothing voice." Can you get in the chair for me, please?"
the girl stared at him oddly and thought. 'Why would he wake me up so late at night?', but she shrugged it off and alked over to the chair. Her father helped her sit into the chair and started to put restrait bands on her. the young girl acted calm, but on the inside she was scaed out of her mind. as he tightened the last restraint band on her waist, she finally had the courage to ask him a question.
"Dad, what are you going to do?" she asked with a hint of fear in her voice.
He smiled and answered." I'm just going to give you a shot Sweetie, nothing more and nothing less." He held up a syringe filled with a strange black liquid." it will only hurt for a bit."
Panic finally set in her mind quickly. she saw him look for a vein in her arm to sink the needle into her skin. he found the perfect vein and slipped the needle into her skin and pushing the syringe down, causing the liquid to eenter into his daughter's veins. She screamed in pain as the black liquid traveled along her blood stream causing a change to happen to her fragile ten year old body. her once stunning azure blue eyes changed to a yellow gold, becoming wider and more wolf like. her once blond hair changed to a pure white, and small patches of fur started to pop up on her skin, it bacame thicker and dog like ina matter of seconds. her restraints broke and she fell to the ground, her bones snapped and reshaped become ong and nimble. a white long tail came out and black claws replaced finger nails, her hands became more wolf like and nimble. a long wolf muzzle replaced her nose and mouth, long sharp teeth showed and a whimper escaped from the human wolf hybrid. with the transformation completed, the human wolf hybrid stood at about 5'5. -
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"It worked!!!" yelled her father with glee,but he failed to notice that she wasnt in restraints anymore; his former daughter howld and attacked him. they both fell to the ground and she bit him in the shoulder, shattering the bone. he screamed and tried to fight back, but to no avail. She sliced at his chest causing more of his blood to spill onto the floor. His screams died down and he stopped moving. The wolf hybrid let go of his shoulder and changed back to a fragile, 4'4 girl with a scared look on her face.
"Daddy?" she said with tears streaming down her face.when she heard no answer, she ran for her life up the stairs out of the basement, not othering to close the dorr behind her. she stumbled up the stairs to the second floor of the house. she ran to her bedroom door and ripped it open, literally. She looked at her door wide eyed. She ten ran to her closet and quickly changed out of her bloody night gown into a black T shirt, jeans, and a pair of black and white converse. She whipped the blood off her hands and arms, noticing her skin had gotten a bit paler. she glanced up at the nearest mirror and gasped in shock. her azure eyes now had specks of gold in them. her once blond hair was now a pure white. she grabbed a bag and quickly stuffed clothes and anything else in the bag. she quickly ran down to the front door of the house. she bursted through the door and ran, never looking back.
:Almost five years later:
A girl about fifteen years old stared out of a passenger train window in boredom. she like some other passengers was on her way to Spark City, New Jersey. Her hair was a pure white and was down to her waist. Her skin was a pale tan, and her azure gold eyes looked like they could get you to do anything for her. Her black s---r, jacket, jeans, and combat boots looked so menacing, manyof the passengers stayed away from where she sat. Her mind wandered until she heard the intercom on the train turn on and the conductor's voice ran out.
"We are now arriving in Spark City, The City of New Beginnings"
she smiled and saw the beautiful city come into view. -
XP I know I suck.
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Grammar and spelling you might want to check. I like the story
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O.O my writing good?!
yah! of course im horrible at grammar. -
I like it anri, but I feel bad for her father, but, it was a bad choice for him to change her
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Yes but it was very violent.
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I agree with Teresa, and maybe a bit more background? Like, where is the girls mother?
But this is still really good. : ) -
Her moms dead. Died of an unknown disease.
Funny how people love my writing on here but people in real life say its very dark. -
sorry of topic but hen you described he girl at first you reminded me of DeDe from dexters labratory.
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It's good.
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really good
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Yah~ more complements.
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Write more, Anri.
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Uh sure. I'll put more but if anyone steals my story I'm finding you and kicking your ass.
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