Do you like the start of my story?
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Thread Topic: Do you like the start of my story?
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This is a Wolf's Rain Fan fiction. I take NO credit for the Wolf's Rain idea. Ok, let's begin!
Shadow was walking fast along the sidewalk. As a matter of fact, nearly running. She was trying to get away from the one thing she hated. The cops. She had just stole a loaf of bread from a man in his house. Well, in this town at least, stealing is the way to life. And it is also no place for a wolf. Especially when wolves are supposed to be extinct. But since wolves are able to hide their true they can hide in human cities. Just like Shadow. Wolves in their wolf form never survive very long in a human-populated area, which is basically everywhere. Shadow started to pick up the pace when she heard someone shout "Thief! Stop you thief!", from behind her. She runs into a narrow alley way and turns into a wolf. She was a small black wolf that looked a lot like a dog. This was her cover whenever she had gotten into a situation, look and act like a dog. The man who she stole the bread from came running into the alley. Shadow barks and wagged her tail, walking over to the man, "Awww! You're a cute little puppy! Yes you are!" The man says in a baby voice. After a second of petting, the man starts to search the entire alley. Eventually, he gave up and walked away, defeated. Only if he knew he was just fooled by a wolf... -
After the man was gone for a long time, shadow changed back into her human form. She was 15 and had wavy black hair and bright green eyes, "That was a close one..." She sighed and walks out of the alley. Sure enough, the police were waiting for her right outside. "Stay right were you are!" They shouted at her. She rolls her eyes and takes off down the street. The police never take after criminals here. Everybody stole way to often. Shadow eventually came across a teen with blond hair and blue eyes that looked about 16 years old. But he wasn't an ordinary teen. He was a wolf. Shadow could tell by his scent and whispered, "I have never seen another wolf in this town....or any town at that!" The boy looked up and stared, "Me neither. But if there are the two of us, there must be others!" He whisper. "Oh, hey! What's your name?" "Shadow. And yours?" "I'm Maori. It nice to meet you!"
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The two wolves search through out the town without any luck. They found dogs and cats and loads of other things, but no wolves. They had finally decided no other wolves live in the town when a young girl's voice speaks up from behind them, "Are you...other wolves?" She whispers confused. Shadow turned around. It was a 11 year old girl with brown hair and green eyes. "Yes. We are." Maori says and looks at the little girl ,"I guess we found another fellow wolf!"
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Its alright. I think you should change some of the names. Like for instance, Shadow, is a very overused name for any animal.
Why not Umbra? Which is the Latin word for the darkest part of a shadow. -
Alright! I can do that! I actually like that name better! Thanks!
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"So, what's your name?" Umbra asks the little girl as the three of them walk through town, "My name is Vita..." She whispers and looks at the ground. "Pretty name!" Maori says cheerfully. "Hey, Vita. Have you seen any other wolves around this city? We were looking for others and we found you." Vita looks up, "I've met just one, but he is hard to find. He wanders around." "Can you give us an idea?" Umbra asks hopefully. She wanted to find as many wolves in this city as possible. "The dump, probably. He hunts the raccoons there" Vita whispers shyly. "Well, come on! Lets find this other wolf!" Maori shouts and starts running in the direction of the dump. Umbra and Vita follow close behind. The finally reach the dump."Haven't we looked here already?" Umbra grumbles. "Probably not close enough..." Vita smirks and changes into her wolf form. She was a beautiful, white, arctic wolf with her same green eyes. She crawls under a pile of trash and barks, "Come on!". Umbra and Maori both change into their wolf forms and crawl under. Under the pile, Umbra saw Vita along with a timber wolf eating a raccoon, "What do you want?" The timber wolf growls, not looking up from his supper, "Umm...Dyami...uhh...we are looking for other wolves want to come?", Vita asks hopefully."No. Seriously?! I'm leaving with those stranger!" Vita gives him puppy-dog eyes and barks, "Pretty please????" After a while he gives up and sighs, "Oh alright. Now, what's next?"
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