Roleplay?
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Thread Topic: Roleplay?
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Fey smiled and greeted the newcomers to their house. When the food magically appeared in front of their eyes they all dug in
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sure
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Lizzie at a big chicken leg
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I normally don't jump into RPs, but...
1. You're switching POVs and tenses. You went from 3rd person to 1st person. You can't do that in writing. It's awkward, and it can really confuse people. Additionally, you went from present tense to past tense within a matter of sentenced. Once again awkward and grammatically wrong.
2. You're lacking punctuation, but that's a personal choice on whether to care or not.
3. Normally people only submit one response to a roleplay and wait for their partner. They don't add on as you did. If you have something you want in your response, add it the first time!
4. They said pairing as, in if this is romance, what kind of a pairing is it? Girl and boy? Boy and boy? Girl and girl? Otherwise, it's just friends and it's more of an adventure/fantasy plot. -
Ok thanks dark)
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(No problem, sorry for jumping in. Enjoy your rp!!)
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it fine lol. btw i answered on the soap or whatever it is)
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After the feast everyone went to there rooms Lizzie jump on the bed and fellasleep.
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canadalover55 NewbieName: vector Cornelius
Age: 15
Gender:male
Looks: looks like buddy holly
Personality sarcastic
Year: 2nd year.
House: ravenclaw -
Ok nice name (What happened to your other account?)
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canadalover55 Newbie(I accendently clicked "click here if you not almanac"
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Lmao
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