O Mighty Ocean Guide Us As We Journey
- Locked by RainInTheShadows on Dec 27, '20 6:19pmReason: Locked because a pretty girl asked
Thread Topic: O Mighty Ocean Guide Us As We Journey
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you never seem angsty or edgy to me dude.. dont worry bout it.
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I can be sometimes.
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how so? i think that if you read my poems and saw my art, youd think im way more edgy, to the point of cringe.
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I'd like to see. I don't judge.
The moons fading light goes out
With naught but a whimper
The dim sun causes me doubt
Colors are lost to me
My friends are my enemy
Shivering
I havent always been dying
But my future was never bright
I cant even begin to love myself
I push everything and everyone away
How can you say you love me?
Nobody can
Everyones silent
I bite my tongue to stop the tears
Tearing at the flesh on my hands
Hoping Im so ugly I cant be loved -
i like that poem, its pretty creative dude. i dont see that as edgy/angsty. it reminds me of my poems somewhat, but, watch, lemme post one of mine. theyre too cringy.
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Loving is fine if you be the one who's loved
Nothing will feel it down and break it up
Into some horror's pieces
Lies awake, feed the demon's heart
Making yours hurt so much, like it or he will
Deaf ears make unto you deaf eyes
Lies awake, feed the demon's heart
Leave mercy and rhyming walls
Fake and real between me
Why would he bequeath me
Lifting hours from time
From hour's pieces
Lies awake, feed the demon's brain
Force blue while you demonize issues
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Leave mercy and rhyming walls
Fake and beauty moving away
Why would he bequeath save
For the hour's pieces
Loving is fine if you be the one who's loved
Turned wheel too hard
Spinning like everything turns as well
You spin less and less
Why do I see pain induced
By spinning wheel lacking you
Spinning free
Hurting life, treading on death
Cleansing "why do I see pain"
Fearing life
Ominous in you
Dreamt by you
Perfidious aloft in the skies
Many
Down, down, deeper in the lord's chastity
Reeling in wails of peace from
Freedom running free
Freedom also runs from...
Raindrops on me
On me
On me
Treading softly
Hear a slight of being there was
Fervent but in need of power
Loving is not a curse
Loving reaches me
Adored by earth
Creatures of God roam all the time
It's my word
Adorned as much...
Deep, deep, roaming into me
Cross a thing you need
Roar, roar your soul
It reeks of blackened peach
Deep, deep, into me
Cross a thing you want to rid
Traveling
Reveal to your soul
What your soul revealed
Cross a thing you sold for a learning grief
Cry for solid wings
Bless eternity,
The soft wings will crumble, dressed in womb and tongue
Lie in purgatory
Cross exigency -
It's not cringey.
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thanks, my style is weird because it changes a lot.
and dude, the last 3 lines of your poem really are anything but edgy/angsty. its a realistic passionate despair that anyone can relate to. thats talent right there. if you ever listened to deftones, theyre songs are similar -
I've never listened to deftones
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Hm..
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I don't know...
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Mornin
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Morning.
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Are you oky?
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Yes.
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