My school essay on Romeo and Juliet
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Romeo and Juliet is a romantic tragedy by William Shakespeare. It is a story about how two star crossed lovers meet through their two worlds of hate, at the end of the play, Romeo and Juliet end up killing themselves. The family feud is the cause of the deaths of Romeo and Juliet, because family hatred drove them to kill themselves, the family kept them apart, and the feuds caused violence and death.
Family hatred drove Romeo and Juliet to kill themselves. Their family feud literally caused Romeo and Juliet to risk their life to go and see each other. So much hate was like a huge infinite brick wall in front something that you desperately need. Thats how Romeo and Juliet felt; they demolished the wall of hate built by their familys feud by an act of love where desperation caused them to kill themselves. If there was no family feud, there would be not hate. If there was no hate, there would be love, and where theres love, theres peace, and thats all Romeo and Juliet ever wanted for them and their families, love and peace.
The two families, the Montagues and the Capulets both kept Romeo and Juliet apart. After the Capulets party, Romeo had to stay behind and sneak into the garden just to get a glimpse of Juliet and to talk to her. It almost felt as if the familys wanted the feud to go on forever and to not have any love in between their familys at all, only hatred was allowed. Romeo and Juliet proved both of their familys wrong by committing acts of love, for example marrying and sneaking private love meetings. All of that hatred drove them so mentally pressured that they had to kill themselves.
The family feuds caused violence and death. Theres no questioning that point, the opening scene after the play fight in between Benvolio and Mercutio, there was a brawl in between haters from the Capulet and Montague families. Hate is the key element in this feud, both families have an ancient grudge on each other but we never find out what the grudge is, it doesn`t mention in the play why they really hate each other, or why theres so much hate, violence and death. All of this violence and death is just futile and just adds onto the ancient grudge to make it more and more powerful, thankfully Romeo and Juliets love put a stop to all of the hate.
The deaths of Romeo and Juliet was the cause from the family feud, family hatred put too much pressure on them and forced them to kill themselves, the feud tried to keep them apart and cause lots and lots of violence and death on both sides of the family. If there was no family feud, hate would not exist and would be replaced by friendship, and maybe even love. Unfortunately, the huge amount of hate from both of the familys drove Romeo and Juliet to kill themselves. The grudge isnt explained so we don`t really know why the familys truly hate each other, all we know that it lead to many avoidable deaths, including Romeo and Juliet. Therefore the family feud is the main cause of the deaths of Romeo and Juliet, there are many more reasons why Romeo and Juliet died, but the main reason, the reason that cause all of the other possibilities are the family feud. Thats the cause of the death for poor Romeo and Juliet. -
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Well?
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you need to cite the play, specific parts that can support your claims
you also rely on pathos a lot to make us feel bad for romeo and jules. not a bad thing in most cases, but you do it a lot. I'd rely more on ethos to establish family morale as you claim it was the families that drove them to kill themselves
you need more support for your claims, too -
damn wolfy
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There are also grammatical errors as well, for example such as "familys" when it's spelled as "families".
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also your conclusion and opening paragraphs are kind bleh
not expanded enough and need some more insight
and dont end your closing that way, we know it was the reason because you spent the whole time talking about it. it makes your reader think you don't think they were smart enough to pick up on it. -
yeah I agree with drew
check your spelling and mechanics
editing is always key, though, so dont worry, we're all here to help :) -
Also 'kill themselves' sounds a bit informal, especially if it's for a school project and teachers would see this so I'd probably change it to 'commit suicide' which sounds more formal. Also you tend to repeat the same facts a few times.
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^^^also agree
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Thanks guys
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