REVISION ADVICE
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*Blushes* Thanks, and her family left her in the room to die because she was a vampire, and a disgrace to a vampire hunting family.
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That's very interesting. I like the plot. Very creative.
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Same here
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Roeth
Book 2: The family blood
5 years later, Roeth tries to find out more about her family, it starts out that she goes to an old guy the boy's dad told her about, who was the friend of Sir Ernest Halbert, Roeth's grandfather, and he was a vampire killer, though he was a werewolf, they had killed vampires together, this old guy lives faraway because he was a werewolf and didn't want to kill people, so he told her his story, then one day she finds the diary of Matilda Ormond, whom reveals a part of her family history, she was Ernest's wife, and there was a ruby necklace in her diary, then, she finds out she's a vampire when she kills the boy's sister, he takes her at midnight and ties her to a cross, she's dying but cuts the rope she was tied to, but now a werewolf is coming to get her. The old guy!
She survives and kills him (very difficultly) she buries him in a graveyard next to her grandpa's grave -
You have true potential in the writing field. I look forward to reading one of your published novels someday.
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The diary is found in the room she was left to die in. (They go back to see if there was anything)
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wowzers roady! thats an awesome one!
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*Blushes* How come you're so creative at complimenting, Charlie? LOL.
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And you too, Bunnies, you both make me smile.
Thank you for your support. -
Roeth
Book 3: 3 nights of werewolf
She's punished for killing the old guy, and she's sent to the emperor, who tells her she has to be turned in to a werewolf, and for three days, she will be punished with something, if she survives, then she will be set free, she finds out her grandfather used to be a werewolf and he put that rule, he was like her to the family, a disgrace, whom was Ernest Halbert, but when a vampire kills the emperor because he didn't like the rule, she feels disgraced and wants to become a vampire hunter, but is laughed at because she's a vampire herself.
And these hunters won't stop hunting her down not realizing that the wolf is her.
And in the third night, a wolf will kill her but a monster comes out and saves her (for book 4) -
It's very easy to compliment you and your stories because they are so well thought up.
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no probs roady!
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And Ernest Halbert was a disgrace to the family because he was a werewolf and werewolves are friends to vampires but he didn't see it that way.
*Blushes* thanks -
T.H.A.T W.A.S A.M.A.Z.I.N.G!
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Wow, your story descriptions make me want to read the whole series right now.
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