~Crystal's feeling thread~
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Thread Topic: ~Crystal's feeling thread~
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Sorry...?
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It's fine... You don't need to be sorry.
He has been missing you a lot. Where have you been? -
Busy.
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Aww Maddie look at his thread, he stood up for you....
He's awesome... He really loves you... -
I know. I saw his thread earlier. What they said about me was disgusting.
But Adam, the hero he is, stood up for me. I don't deserve things like that, I haven't even thanked him yet. -
What page was it?
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I need your opinion on something.
Can I post part of a story I made, and you can critique? Because honestly I don't know if the story is okay. -
I know.
He sure is for you....
Well...
Thank him once he comes on... -
^late post to Crystal.
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D: I just want to know what page it was in his thread.
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Yeah, yeah. Post.
Page 1877 to the last one. -
Warning: This story may contain some upsetting scenes. You have been warned.
All scenes, characters and events are completely made up from my imagination. If part of this story/characters resemble that of another story you know, it is pure coincidence.]
The Dark Forest- Part One.
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Chapter One- A Mistake
This story is taken from the point of view of a fourteen year old girl called Freya.
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I knew it was true. The time when my parents had declared that I was a mistake. I never cried or was upset when they had said that, I just got on with my life and tried to forget about it. The problem was, I couldn'tjustforget what they said.A mistake Freya. You are a mistake.Those words were etched into my mind like a carving, a memory that scarred me. I had never thought properly about it before, I had never realized what it really meant. Well, I was only eight years old when they had told me.
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The rain pelted down, hitting the ground like bullets. Washing away the stains that covered it. Maybe those were bad memories, the dirt that covered the cold slabs of concrete, leaving dark blemishes, until the rain washed the bad memories away. Then they would come back again.
I stared out of the cold, rain splattered window, wishing the rain would carry on until the world ended. Of course I couldn't be so stupid to think that, but oh yes I was, I was shallow enough to think that all bad memories would be instantly cleared up when it rained. I was only seven back then, but now I'm fourteen. I have learnt that things aren't as easy as rain, that we all have to face the true facts of how hard life really is. I'm relieved that I have now grown up, left my young, shallow years behind. I'm glad that I now know that things aren't as easy as one, two three or a, b, c. I know now. I know what the truth is really like. I'm in the real world now, not my little dream world. And that's good.
"Freya, get your ass down here right now. Your dinner's going to get cold." I heard my mum shout. Ugh. Why did she always have to shout at me, I didn't even do anything wrong. If anyone's doing wrong, it's her for sure.
I sighed wistfully, then reluctantly pulled myself away from the window.Goodbye rain, I will see you soon.
Hurriedly, I headed downstairs to have dinner, as I entered the kitchen, a wonderful smell wafted over. I assumed it was probably the dinner being served up. I entered the dining room and took a seat at the large oak table that was neatly placed in the centre of the room.
"No need to be so damn impatient." I muttered, making sure no one could hear me. Or so I thought.
"Maybe you would like to repeat what you said? Disrespectful child." My dad hissed angrily at me, "if you dare speak like that again to your mother, I will be sending you up those stairs to your bedroom, with a nice hard slap."
I rolled my eyes.Oh, so now you're trying to get smart with me? Nice. I'm up.
"Oh Jack, there really isn't no need to start an argument at dinner time, is there?" I heard my mum tell dad, "and Freya, you just keep your mouth shut. I don't want to hear another peep from you for the rest of dinner."
I guess I had to listen to them. I had already been scolded by my dad, and now my mother as well? Jesus Christ, they're the ones who need to learn to be respectful, not me.
I guess I just had to survive another few years here, and then I'll be old enough to live on my own. Away from my parents. Far away.
2016-03-05 06:51:41
What do you think? I'm okay with negative opinions too, just be honest. :3 -
gtg shopping
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It seems good to me. Interesting plot. Grammar is okay, keep it up.
Bye. -
Nevermind, I read it all. It's just a bunch of attention whore emo newbs, so whatever. Sphinx is incredibly stubborn and refuses to listen to
truecriticisms of people that are "dearest" to him.
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