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Painful Endings
Everything comes to an end
Everything runs its course
But Love,
Is the only one that
Has a never ending pain
When it runs through you
Like a river
Swallowing you whole
You think you can
Swim across
Make it to the other side
Unharmed and stronger
But you get stuck in the middle
Getting lost in the current
Being pulled under
You finally make it
To the other shore
Only you realize
A part of you has drowned
Its been lost under the water
And carried away by the current
You feel empty and no longer complete
You feel the burning pain
That never goes away
Everything comes to an end
Everything runs its course
But Love,
Takes away more
Than it gives
When it leaves you empty -
Untitled 1
The wind blowing
A gentle breeze
A soft whisper in your ear
A loving stroke on the cheek
Blowing rose petals
Across the small pond before me
I look into the sparkling clear water
I can see the cloudy sky
That hovers over me
The bare trees that stand above me
The surface that i rest on
And as I look to the girl
Who is staring back at me
I can see her sadden face
All of those secrets that are untold
Of the pain and betrayal hidden
Behind those telling eyes
And as I look at her
I can feel my heart breaking
The sting in my eyes
My throat tightening up
My tears fall into the water
Creating rivelts
Distorting the image
Making the girl hard to see
As i wait for the water
To become smooth and clear
So I can see her again
But the water never clears
And she is lost to me -
Faded
I feel myself getting smaller
Like I am shrinking
And no one sees
I am fading from site
Like a giant oak tree
That seems to be gettting smaller
The farther you walk away
I feel as if i am fading and cracking
Like the pages in an old book
Worn out from my pages being turned
From being dropped or mistreated
No one to handle me with care
My pages torn out and the binding broken
Another book that will be forgotten
And only mentioned in Literature lessons
I am faded and cracking
LIke the famous Mona Lisa
My beauty and smile ruined
By the lines and chipping paint
But still making me priceless
A piece of art for everyone to admire
Im faded
Cracking
And falling apart -
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Words filling my mind
Pain filling my heart
And tears filling my eyes
I cant control it
And i cant stop it
I feel hurt
Betrayed
And lied to
Everything happend so quickly
And it ended just as fast
Im spinning in circles
When i stop
I feel dizzy
Everything is still twirling
I feel tired and weak
Ready to give up
Ready to let go
My mind is crowded and wont clear
Your words growing louder
My heart is breaking
The pain growing sharper
My tears fall and drip
Stinging me and never stopping
What happened?
And where did it go wrong?
Because I dont know
And Im to scared
To find out
An unsolved mystery
In wait -
Giving
The moon shining
Through the bare branches
On the trees that
Surround me
The leaves blowing
Around me
Lifting my hair
In the soft, gentle breeze
That blows a bitter chill
The sound of a single crow
Echoing in the dark
My tears sliding down
My cheeks and drip from my chin
The dirt and gravel sticking
To my knees as I
kneel on the ground
The moon casting shadows
That reach out to me
Grabbing at my clothes
Feeding on my hurt
I stare at my hands on my lap
Feeling my sleeves stick
To my wrist and arms
Feeling the wet cloth
As it gets darker; redder
Everything starts to fade
And i feel numb
I feel exhausted
And i realized then
I am giving up -
Pieces
My silent sobs
Scream through the dark
A painful sound
That wound make your ears bleed
That could break the strongest glass
My aching body
Begins collapsing into itself
Curling up into a tight bacll
Becoming a bundle of cloth
Shaking from the pain
As my heart rips itself into shreds
ANd i toss and turn in agony
As my sobs quiet
And my body uncurls
My pain begins to dull
A throbbing feeling that soon
Becomes ever present
But my heart still lays
In ragged pieces
All around me
ANd i dont reach to pick them up
I dont try to put them back together
I just leave them ther
To blow away with the wind -
sweetbunny480 Newbiei like all of them
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I quite enjoyed them Nuna!
Your conveying of sincere, raw emotion is rather brilliant, and your honesty is equally so. And the imagery you create through your language is quite a remarkable gift!
However I - personally - would have loved for some verses, some lines to be less descriptive, less literal; almost mysterious or half written. I quite like poems that hide some of it's meaning, in whatever, and leave the reader to unravel the rest. It's almost similar to what A. E. Housman stated.
Having opinionated all of that, I'm nothing but a beginner poet myself and these are all simply my own personal likes; what do I know? :)
Anyways, your poems are brilliant!
Well done Nuna, really well done! -
See, Hear, Speak
Lock my heart away
Inside a wooden box
Toss it into a sea of
Rose thorns
And throw away the key
Turn back on it
Pretend as if it never existed
Cover your ears
And block out the sounds
The breaking of my heart
As it echoes up from its grave
Close your eyes from the sight
Of my unmoving body
Laying by the edge
Close your lips and never
Say a word
Jusk walk away
And ignore what you have done
Because you hear
No pain
And you see
No pain
But you force yourself
To speak of
No pain -
Untitled 3
Smoke rising up from the ashes
The darkened sky closing
In around you
You feel trapped
Lonely and empty
Your heart burned
And gone
Your tears sliding down
Leaving streaks down
Your ash covered face
You stare at the ground
Feeling the wind in your
Dirt filled hair
Bricks and stones
Becoming rubble
You cringe at the sound
Of everything that falls
The cold heat reaching your back
As you stand there
Turned away from the
Tragedy that you cant bare
Turned away
As your world
Is being dragged
Down -
Violets and Roses
Roses are red
Violets are blue
No one loves you
As much as i do
I know you've been hurt
And i know you've cried
But im here now
To ease your pain
And dry those tears
Restless nights
Screams into the dark
I'll be there when you wake
To hold your hand
To calm your fears
Lonely days
And crowded nights
I'll be waiting there
To dance with you in the rain
To sing away your sadness
Roses are red
Violets are blue
I'll always be there
This i promise you
I'll hold your hand
And guide you through the dark
I'll pick you back when you have fallen
I'll hold on
Until you say
"Let go"
Roses are red
Violets are blue
No one loves you
As much as I do -
@Leah: Everybody writes different. They have their own style... just like painters or any other artist. Its why their pieces are originals. No matter how much you try...you cant copy a poet...or an artist
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Yes I quite agree. I'm aware of creating your own style and being original, your poems are quite original; highly commend you for that!
But I - personally - particularly like these type of poems even more in the way in which I explained above. Compose the original compositions you wish to compose, it's just my personal, humble opinion. Like I said, what do I know? I'm a beginner poet myself, and just know my taste.
Your poems are still really great Nuna! -
That's beautiful Lyssa. :) Wonderful work.
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They're all wonderful, for many obvious reason! I'm particularly fond of See, Hear, Speak.
Well done!
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