Help me write a story!
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Thread Topic: Help me write a story!
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So this thread is for anyone to help me write a story!
Paragraph 1-
My eyes drifted from my book to the window. I saw a figure in the distance, a boy whom looked the same age as me. He was face to face with a woman whom looked to be 40. The next thing I heard was yelling, mind you it was around 2 AM. “You really thought it was a good idea to give a stupid little girl the book!” The woman exclaimed, before the boy could answer she yelled “answer me Owen! Why would you give that girl Stella the book, the book that holds all the answers as to why my sister married your father to only go die in a car crash after she had you!” My brain was so foggy that when the boy, Owen, spoke I could barely hear him.
“Because maybe then someone might save me from you, you little witch!” The woman grabbed him by the ear and pulled him to his knees.
“What the hell did you just call me?”
“You know it’s true! I’ve seen you chanting spells or whatever in the dead of night!” Owen accused the woman “you are a witch Melody! Too bad you can’t be an aunt!” Owen said backing away then broke into a run.
“Silly boy! You think you can run from me, like you said I am a witch.” Melody cackled then before I knew it she vanished into thin air!
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What should be next! Is the beginning good I need feedback! 🥺 please. -
This would be a good prologue, I think. Then when it comes to chapter one, you can explain more about what happened in the main character's perspective. Or, if you don't want to do that, you can start chapter one with what happened before the prologue, so the reader understands. If it's just action throughout the whole book, the reader has no idea what's going on, so you need to explain at some point in the beginning.
I think it's a really good start! -
Thx! That really helps
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Paragraph 2-
“Luna! Come downstairs you’re going to be late for school!” This was just like any other day. My mom yelling at me to hurry up, my dad probably reading the newspaper while 2 babies are screaming and kicking. Nothing out of the ordinary for our family of six, yes I did say six my older brother was in the basement probably sleeping and my mom did nothing about it.
“Coming mom!” I said putting earrings in and grabbing my bag. I snatched my phone off my dresser and ran downstairs.
“Morning Mom, Morning Dad, and good morning Lilac and Hope!” I exclaimed. I grabbed my breakfast and went down to the basement. “Hey, Troy get up we gotta leave!” I said.
“Go the hell away Luna!” Troy mumbled.
“Okay, have fun missing first period with Emmmilly!” I said with a smug smile on my face. Troy shot up and ran, I was laughing so hard I almost fell to the floor!
(Technically paragraph 3)
When we got to school I was greeted by my BFFL (Best Friend For Life), Faith, I did my normal routine and slapped Troy on the face then Faith and I practically ran to first period. When we got there we sat in our normal seats and got out our books.
“Class, please welcome out new student, Owen, I want all of you to make him feel welcome. Okay?” Our teacher, Mrs Aspen, announced. “Owen, why don’t you sit next to Luna?”
We went on our whole day no weird behavior from Owen. I wish everything would have stayed that way, I thought he was just a normal student, but oh, boy how was I very, very wrong.
(There are definitely some grammar errors but that’s fine I’ll make my friend go through it and fix it)
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