Instrumental Public Thread
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Jeeshan NoviceSong: Aas Paas Hain Khuda
Meaning: God is nearby
Dhundla jaaye jo manzilein
When the destinations get hazy
Ek pal tu nazar jhuka
Make your eye sight low once
Jhuk jaaye sar jahan wahi
Where the head bows down there
Milta hain rabb ka raasta
The God's way gets open to you
Teri kismat tu badal de
Your luck, change it
Rakh himmat bas chal de
Be brave keep courage, just start going
Tere saathi mere kadmon ke nishaan
Your companion is my footsteps
Tu na jaane aas paas hain khuda
You don't know God is nearby. -
Jeeshan NoviceSong: Hamari Adhuri Kahana
Meaning: Our incomplete story
Type: Love
Singer: Arijit Sing
Song:
Paas aaye duriyan phir bhi kam na hui
Came near but distance didnot decrease
Ek adhoori si hamari kahani rahi
One incompleted story of ours left
Aasman ko jamin
Land for sky
Yeh jaroori nahin
Is not necessary
Jaa mile, jaa mile
Go meet, go meet
Ishq saccha wahi jisko milte nahin
Love is true for the one who doesnot get
Manzilein, manzilein
Destinations
Rang the noor tha
The colours were like light
Jab karib to tha
When you are near
Ek jannat sa tha
It was like on paradise/heaven
Yeh jahaan
This world
Waqt ki ret pe
In the sands of time
Kuch mere naam sa
Something like my name
Likh ke chor gaya tu kahaan?
Where did you left written?
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Nikt NoviceYou wrote you need some poems, I think I can give you a few advices (yes I write poems 'sometimes'). Try to think how do you feel and describe it, or write about your believes (if they are 'controversal' it's going to be interesting), or about things you love, or about what you wish you can tell somebody (don't have to be nice) but don't 'tell' to who. Use as much metaphors and epithets as you can to describe literately EVERYTHING, but not too much. Then put it into some strophes (maybe 2-3?) depending on what it is about, something like chapters in books. And then divide strophes into werses, not too long (memos in phone are good to write it, try to divide it the way no werse is much longer than 'a memo werse'). Then read it to see if it sounds ok, change it as many times as you need. Keep only what you like, rewrite what you dislike as many times as you want. You can post it here so I can help you if you'll have any problem. It doesn't have to have rhymes, it doesn't have to fit some scheme. Write what YOU want. Write what you FEEL, not what THEY want to hear. Remember, art is a weapon. Your weapon.
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Nikt NoviceI hope I helped. If you need help just ask. Writing comes to me naturally, so I guess I can be a useful 'tool' for you. Sorry for mistakes, I'm not good at english. And about that ending, I had to write it :) Sorry I'm so late, I had no time... And one more thing, for inspiration you can listen to some good, filled with emotions music *thinking about MCR* Sorry if I seem a little 'I know it all', but I just HAVE to help people when it comes to some kind of art... For now so long and goodnight (no, not really) *starts singing Helena*
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Jeeshan NoviceOk Nikt than you so much. I will start making some mediocre poems and post it here. Bye
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Nikt NoviceI'm happy I helped :) Have fun making these poems :)
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Jeeshan NoviceOk! Where do you live?
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Nikt NoviceJust moved to UK :)
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Jeeshan NoviceCool!
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Jeeshan NoviceI searched internet and I got this story:
Few teenagers, one day, went to a church for praying. There was one boy and one girl behind them. The boy was looking the girl but pretending as if he was not and the girl was also doing the same.
They both went to pray, but did not prayed, they looked at each other. After praying they came back. They both open e-buddy and chated with other people but looking at each other without pretending.
The girl loved the boy and the boy loved the girl most.
Suddenly an earthquake occured, the buildings were falling down. The church was also. Everyone on the church came out. Only the boy and the girl left there.
The boy saw a piece of rock, just above the girl, falling. So he pushed the girl away and...the rock fall on him. The girl shouted and started weeping.
The boy said: Run away before...
Girl (Weeping): I will never leave you.
Boy: Why? Go..run
Girl: Because I...
Boy: I love you, now run.
Girl (Crying): I wanted to hear this from you.
Boy pushes the girl: Please run away, I got your hand, and your love, now I can die in peace.
And... The boy dies, blood comes out from everywhere... He was crushed up.
The girl runs away crying.
THE END. -
Nikt NoviceHow sad :'( I barely stopped myself from crying (to not make family ask me why) Pleast tell me it's just a story, please tell me it didn't happened really...
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Nikt NoviceWe should make something like 'part two'... Something as sad as that story... Ok I've got an idea:
The girl runs away crying. She runs to her home, where her family was. She was getting closer to her home when she started to get bad feelings. You know that feeling when you feel something is wrong, but don't know what? She felt exactly this way, despite the fact that she knows WHAT's wrong. The earthquake occured. The boy she loves sacrifited himself to save her. Everybody she knows, everybody who she cares about can die every minute. But she knows there's something more...
Soon she's in front of her house. Or, in front of what WAS her house. There's no chances her family survived. But still... Hope dies last, you know... Earth is still shaking, but she decides to search for her family in the ruins. After a few minutes (that seems to be last for hours), she finds three bodies lying on the ground under some heavy rocks. Blood is everywhere. Everybody would be terrifired by this scene, but the bodies once were girl's family. She decides she can't take it anymore. -
Nikt Novice*continues*
How could I know it all? After eartquake ends, I was waking past a ruins of a house. On the gund, under a pile of rocks, were four boies. A torned rope was tied around one of them's neck.
What happened to the girl, the boy and the girl's family? They're now happy, together. In heaven... -
Nikt NoviceWhat do you think?
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Jeeshan NoviceFirst of all sorry for late reply. And, Yes I loved that part 2. So what should be the name?
I guess how is it?:
The Lonely Angel.
(It will be best if you choose any other)
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