Random Story First Draft
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Thread Topic: Random Story First Draft
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I headed into a heavily wooded and snowy area. My family was giving me too much that made me rage, so I became sad and seeked another place to be for the night; in secrecy, obviously. My mother would never let me into this place on my own, especially at night, which it was approaching already.
I shivered. Should've taken my coat.
I had been by this place a few times before, only when our family had to take the car a long way home, otherwise we'd never go down this road. So that was a bonus if my mother came to look for me tonight. It was a forest, very snowy around this time of year, and it bordered the road. And I always wondered what it was like there, so that would be a bonus too.
Maybe this place wasn't ideal for spending the night, but I wanted to be anywhere but my house right then, and I didn't want any people around to see me just walking around the streets alone. And I didn't think of this place as anything dangerous. So, this was where I was going to stay, and I would deal with any punishment next morning when I went back to my house.
I also had a sleeping bag. If I hadn't taken that, I probably wouldn't have even been able to go to sleep.
So I found a tall tree inside the forest, throwing some pine cones into a place so I knew where I came from, and got into my sleeping bag. Surprisingly, I didn't find it hard to go to sleep.
It was strange. I thought I remembered going to sleep, but I also didn't remember waking up, and now I was awake. What just happened?
It was also daytime now. So, I got up, rolled up my sleeping bag, and looked for the pine cones I placed.
But I couldn't find them. In fact, it didn't seem like there were any pine cones around here at all. But last night, I had remembered there were lots of pine cones, and I had placed most of them in a single spot. Now they were all gone.
Then I started noticing other things, like the bark, which was a bit red, and the leaves were tinted pink. The trees were also shorter than I remembered. I had just woken up, so I thought I was just seeing things a bit weird. I didn't know about the pine cones, though.
So I looked in the sky to find the sun, thinking that it could possibly lead me back to where I wanted to be. There were no clouds. I could see most of the sky, but the trees must've been blocking the sun.
So, I walked in the direction I thought I came from when I first came into the forest. I walked for about ten minutes, and I came to to the road that bordered the forest. Nice! Lucky guess.
Now, just to see, I looked up into the sky. It was all clear, I could see all of it. Blue and beautiful.
There was no sun.
That could not have just been my eyes. There was no sun in the sky at all.
I was standing on the road. I was too surprised and shocked that I forgot about that, and there was a honk to my left.
There was a car going extremely fast down the road, with two wide-eyed but calm-looking people, whose faces looked exactly alike in the two front seats. I did not have time to think or act.
Suddenly, the car sailed right through my body like there was nothing there. I felt nothing either.
After a couple seconds, I looked back at the car. In the back window, I could see two children: a boy and a girl. They were staring back at me with a completely calm face but very wide eyes, and they had the exact same faces as the other two people in the front.
At this point I panicked. I started thinking like I had no state of mind.
Am I dead?
Am I hallucinating?
...Am I dreaming?
That had to be it. But it felt completely real, and it didn't feel like I was going to wake up any time soon.
As I figured this out, I noticed the sky was reddening, and when it got to blood red color, giant purple jellyfish slowly started floating down from above the clouds, which were now covering the sky and had lightning flash from inside. One of the jellyfish raised a tentacle and sent a flaming fireball at me.
I thought fast and quickly jumped and rolled away, as the fireball exploded a dozen feet away.
I was going to have to fight my imagination. This wasn't my only challenge during the time I was dreaming. I discovered a lot about myself during the time as well. They said you can do anything while you're in a lucid dream.
Well, looks like the dream world has its limits.
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It's ok I think you use the word 'and' a lot of the time also a lot of 'i's like its more stating something rather then telling a story but I think you should also write some more
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@jellypenguin Oh, sorry about all the "and"s. I noticed the other thing too, that's just because I'm tired, plus it's just the first draft...thanks for reading, I'll make more soon (probably)!
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Interesting. Write more.
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I quickly dodged another fireball that came from a jellyfish. I had not remembered these things from any other dreams, and I'd never thought about anything like them. I had to get to my house quick-my family was probably in there. Maybe they could help.
So I hid behind some trees in the forest, while making sure I could still see the road, and made my way across it. I could still see the jellyfish. They were a light purple, almost like lavender or pink. They were also gigantic, the size of a hotel; their fireballs were tiny compared to them, as big as my hand. When they shot fireballs, they were raising their tentacles, and they seemed to come from nowhere.
Then I noticed where they came from. I must've gotten the idea from ghasts. They're big, have tentacles, and they shoot flaming fireballs that explode. Did that mean everything I had ever thought about was in this dream land? Well, it was my mind.
But if that was the case, this wasn't the only world here. I needed to get somewhere less dangerous.
But for now, I was just trying to survive, so I hurried quicker down the road and to my home.
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