Need some feedback on this
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Thread Topic: Need some feedback on this
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Yes, I have a lot
JUST ONCE
Love will be
entirely
What a sadness needs
Yet disloyal
It follows free
Then leaves
From the love
Get desire of
But need to get through
Good follows you to the end
Stays with you
Don't look back
Don't go back
To the place you hardly know
To this place
Unfamiliar face
You're alone
With the clock
Turned back, I see,
Every night or so I dream
Reminds me of this life I lead
Just once -
wow its great
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Thank you :)
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welcome
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"we all die
the goal isn't
to live forever
the goal is to
create something
that will" -
Holy that's awesome..oh my god. (Sorry I'm a dork)
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thanks dork are great (I am one)
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if I write your name in the sand
waves wash it away
but if I write your name in my heart
the pain will never go away -
Good, I'm a huge dork though. Did you write it?
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I have this one from some time ago
the whole point of dreaming isn't,
to hope it is to do
even when the odds are against you. -
no not the create something that will
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That's also cool. Simple, mine are too complex
I've got nothing to show
I've got all I know
I know it's hard to be
Something you are wanting
I've got one more chance
One more chance with you
I've been so abused
Yet have something to lose
Claim you take one a day
But still you take
And take a day
I finally was who you wanted me to be
A heartache you had once gone
Felt nothing but pain
As real as something so fake
I gave you all I had
All my pride, all I had
Now my darkness rains
It rains, it rains
Trying hard to leave
Is there something wrong with me
There's something wrong with me
Feeling everything
In love with nothing
Blame yourself on me
For surely you'll see
Who you're supposed to be
Now before you go
Listen in on me
My face is all I own
And it won't be yours to keep
And on this, you can trust me -
wow your amazing
have you ever though of putting you pomes to music -
Again Thank you. Yeah most of my poems are lyrics to songs I make. For example
And for a while I've sought the world
More than once did I embrace what I hold
Out of all the things to hurt you where are you now?
Where'd you go?
Where'd you go?
Down in lies, my bed sinks down into (forsaken)
My favorite lies are those said by you (with no origin)
The sun no longer gives off that violent vibe(My faith is)
And After I've fallen down so many times
I'm alive
I'm alive
Alive
Alive
Massive feeling thrown out from my heart
So strong a saying managed through the dark
Lifted from a haven born in the cold
I'll never learn to love before it's old
(Instrumental with choir ahhs)
(Instrumental piano solo)
(Insert voices in Latin here)
de fumo in flammam
corpora lente augescent cito extinguuntur
If time could stop then where would we be now?
If days grew longer how would I be found
The morning comes but everything from that night
Sticks around
Sticks around
(Instrumental with choir ahhs)
(insert Latin voices again)
Deo duce, ferro comitante
bis vincit qui se vincit in victoria
(Fades out) -
nice
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