The underwater mystery girl!
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Thread Topic: The underwater mystery girl!
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Plot: A boy is on summer vacation for 3 months. Him and his family goes on a trip to Hawaii. The boy goes out on a walk and finds something or someone peeking out from under the water. It stares at him for a long time. One day he goes out again and see's something very weird on a rock.
Characters:
Name: Jake Brown
Age: 18
Looks: Brown hair, Tan skin, Hazel eyes, 5'7, Muscular
Personality: Sweet, Gentle (sometimes), Intelligent, Can be a pain
Name: Claire holts
Age: 17
Looks: Blonde hair, Sky blue eyes, Tan skin, 5,4
Tail color: reddish blue
Personality: Happy, Cheerful, Intelligent, Gentle, Caring, Loving, Sweet -
It all started the last day of school. Everyone was excited to get out of school and party all summer long, while I'm stuck in an airplane for hours with my boring parents, but the best part about it is, that I get to go to Hawaii. Anyway back to what I was saying, everyone at school was having a blast but they always cry in the end. They say their goodbyes and leave till next time. Anyway, it was the middle of day and everyone was walking, and talking, running and playing around. Then theirs the jocks and cheerleaders. I was one of them. I was the QB of the football team. Ohh Sorry, I didn't tell you what my name was, Well, my name is Jake Brown.
It was the end of the day now and everyone was out of school and saying their goodbyes. I went home and just sat there for a moment to soak all this in! It was finally summer. The best part about it is, I'm going to Hawaii. A few day later, when we were all packed up and ready to go, we took a taxi and headed to the airport. We got on the plane and flew all the way to the middle of the pacific ocean. As we got out of the plane it was already midnight. We found a hotel called "The Hilton" and stayed there. The next day, me and my family went out for lunch. They had feast. There was Roasted pigs, a food with a plant that you can eat, I think it's called Taro. They also make this paste with it and it was very good. -
Dang it.
now I'm hungry. -
After all that was done, we went back to the hotel and rested. It was 2:00 PM, and I felt like going on a walk. "Mom, I'm gonna go for a walk on the beach" I said to my mom, "Okay Honey, be careful" She said. I left and went around the building to this white sanded beach with a beautiful view of another island peeking out from the water, there was dolphins jumping out of the water too, It was really amazing. I took a picture of the veiw and some of the dolpfins jumping out of the water. It was really amazing to see everything. I went back to the hotel and went to tell my mom everything. I got to the floor that our room was on and I heard screaming and crying. I walked into our room and my mom and dad was screaming and yelling at each other. "What is going on?" I asked my mom and dad. They didn't answer me. My dad was about to hit my mom when I ran and blocked him from hitting her. He looked at me and stormed out of the room. My mom was crying and looking at me. I hugged her and looked at her in the eyes. "What happened when I was gone?" I asked her as she sat down. "When you lefted, I was on the phone with "Room Service" and I told them what to bring up to our room for breakfast, I asked your father what he wanted to eat and he didn't answer, when I was done talking, your father came into the room and started yelling at me. He said I wasn't good enough for him and he said he wish he never married me and that I can't do anything right" she said.
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O....M....G....
dashavu (Don't think I spelt that right)
my dad would do that to my mom.
Oh and just a tip, when you right something
"Okay honey, be careful" Make sure you put a comma after it like "okay honey, be careful,"
The story's great by the way. Keep it up.
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