Spiral
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Thread Topic: Spiral
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It asks me what's the matter,
It taps me on the shoulder.
Whispers to me when I'm down,
Creeps up to me when I'm mad.
"Spiral, Spiral! The only reason I am mad is people telling lies.
He's cutting up hearts,
ripping out souls."
It bugs me until the last bit comes out,
Nags me day and night.
"Spiral, Spiral!
He's twisting around my words!
Cheating on life.
He doesn't trust me
When I promise him so."
The story behind this is that my best friend told me he was asking her out, and then he was denying it and saying i flirt with other guys too much. So then at the last period, i called him a fuk tard and broke up with him. -
wow you can almost taste the bitterness
good job! sorry bout the guy though... -
it's a great poem, i can really feel the bitterness and loss. i'm very sorry about your ex.
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thnx
its ok. and wat do yhu mean by 'tasting bitterness'? -
you know... your very good with selecting the right words so you can just feel the emotions coming right out of the poem.
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oooooooh! ok. thnx!
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