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  • My character is named Ashanna. (Ash-a-na)

    She lives on a planet called Emoria. It is basically a replica of the earth with different animals and contidents. It is an au Earth where everyone doesn't pollute the plant, has elemental powers (Fire, Air, Water, Earth (called Emoria),Engery and Darkness. If anything Major happens on earth they alert Emoria if it was good or bad and what lead up to it so they can avoid it if bad and try to make it happen if good. Also they are all replacements of humans on earth. Ashanna is a replacement for a girl named Lori. Whenever something major happens they feel their pain. At anytime the replacement for a mom giving birth will fall onto the floor while giving birth and a baby will appear next to her.

    Ashanna is a Fire Emalent (that is what they call Humans) SHe is 14 and has no idea who her mom is. The person representing their mom fell on the floor with 3 other girls next to her. They all live together now. Ashanna and her "sister Novella (Energy) were practicing their elements when Novella git shocked and died. Ashanna blames herself and has Tanidenphobia, the fear of partnership in emoria. She had brown eyes \that look like they are burning when shes mad. She is 14 and 5,8 my dream height. She has black hair that is died red and magenta. She is very good at her power.

    Ashanna
    2
    • she is 32% Mary sue :/

      Ashanna
      1
    • I love her. Nothing else I can say-

      MochiTraceiChan
      1
    • I love her more than MochiTraceiChan does

      Damien Williams
      1
  • I made a new OC, Morutchi Kontayo!

    She is a circus performer that has anger issues but is still easily excited. She has a lavender like bear cap that covers her hair, a purple dress with black polka-dots all over, darkish blue jeans, and boots. She's Chilean and occasionally likes to make traditional South American dishes such as empanadas for both her and her workpartners who are each around the same age as her, 18-19 (she's 19, an '01 gal [I think]). Her birthday is May 9th, which happens to be Mother's day.

    She got 28% but I tried to answer the answers that I know are true/false about her.

    MochiTraceiChan
    2
  • 15 % Marry Sue isnt terrible. Although in my character, Luckys, universe the god trait is kinda the whole point. Hes known as an almighty omnipotent being but hes really still scared and blissfully ignorant at times. In his universe he created humans (twice after the first time failed) once on the moon which was attacked by other civilizations with bombs that created craters on the moon (science is different here) and because of Luckys ability to make everything from clay (almost everything) the moon was covered in a gray dust (no wind on the moon, no clay dust floating away.). After being taken by the civilizations King (who was created by Luckys abusive goddess mother to fix him due to him being imperfect in her eyes, white diamond who) he was married off to him, he was abusive, he broke Lucky for a bit. Lucky escaped to Earth, he hit Earth hard enough to crack the entire crust, (the Hadean period) and he fell asleep for a few million years. Waking up to see that he was alone he cried and cooled the earth, helping create an atmosphere. It turned out his twin had hitched a ride to Earth with him and created volcanoes so Lucky could safely walk around. (Hes not immune to fire you know) After covering the world in a bit of clay his older brother arrived from being frozen in the core of Neptune. To put it short he created water and then life began. Now you might be asking, wheres the sun? His twin brother and him made the sun as a project for their mother before she threw them to different corners of the galaxy. (Explains universal expansion.) This isnt very relevant but he is technically blind, he can see shapes but only where direct sunlight hits. (He cant move at night or sunset.) and only sunlight, no flashlight, no fire. He mostly navigates by touch which makes sense since he likes to sculpt in the sunlight. Also sorry if it seems out of order its 2 in the morning.

    Yeetser0Neetster
    2
    • A lot of these questions came word-for-word from the Universal Mary-Sue Litmus Test from Springhole.

      sporkupine
      2
  • Also, Tracei has Burgundy/dark magenta eyes, a minty green nose, a light pink body, purple inside ears and a purple stomach, and rosy pink cheeks. She also is OBSESSED with Hot Topic, Pop-Cult (I think it means Pop-Culture), and Clairs, three of her favorite stores in a mall. She also enjoys reading, especially the Twilight and Harry Potter books. She's on the 5th Twilight book, Midnight Sun, and the 3rd Harry Potter book, The Prisoner of Azkaban. She also likes the book series, Dork Diaries (it's like Diary of a Wimpy Kid but underrated, and in my opinion, better-), and is unsure about whether or not there's a 15th book yet. Her favorite coffee is a White Chocolate Mocha Frappuccino with Whipped Cream, Caramel Drizzle, and a little bit of Cinnamon.

    MochiTraceiChan
    2
    • Here's the rest of her description 25%
      Name: Tracei
      Species: Dog
      Gender: Female
      Age: 22

      Preferences: Anyone, as long as she trusts them or thinks they might like her back.

      Main fandom/originated fandom: Happy Tree Friends

      Birthday: May 18th, 1998

      Bio: Tracei is a 22 year old dog who enjoys relaxing, reading, and having fun with some coffee and friends. She did experience some negative experiences as a child/teen, as her parents separated when she was 12, and she started going to therapy a few months after. Whenever she hears yelling, screaming, overall threats, even if pretend, or anything that reminds her of her parents' divorce, she can't stop herself from harming the people who said/did these things, and once all is said and done, she immediately regrets it and starts crying. Her main weapon of choice is a knife, or pepper spray. She chose her father for custody, and personally liked it when they used to calm down and read a book or play a game. Her current crush is Flippy, a 22 year old bear. She mainly likes him because he reminds her of her father, who passed when she was 17. She also likes him for his overall personality. She hasn't asked him out to a date yet, as she is afraid he will reject her/start hating her.

      MochiTraceiChan
      -1
    • I thought I lost my first comment so I copied it to here sorry lol-

      MochiTraceiChan
      -1
  • 23%

    Huh. That's pretty nice,especially for a fanmade character. I didn't want her TOO boring to be considered as a mere background character (or comic relief), or TOO much of a Mary-sue to be unrelatable. But I honestly expected her to have a higher... Mary-sueness percent? I mean, she IS part of a line of "cursed" decendants of a main character and gets discriminated because if it...

    But what if the races have unusually colored hair and eye colors (ex. Purple, green, blue, pink, etc.), which is considered normal in their world? I don't think they would be a Mary-sue with that, except if the character has some type of hair/eye color that stands out.

    LunarWarrior16
    3
  • 23%

    A timid girl with slight pink blonde hair and pinkish eyes.

    Cannot do anything alone (unless w/ others and I mean like merged in) and is a singer however this really buys into stuff like psycho pop. Just tryna live life as a slightly popular artist..

    She technically isn't traumatized but in 'spin-offs' are (occasionally, usually by a fellow character)

    She also isn't human by technicality she is technically a fluid (named HANF, highly adaptive non-newtonian fluid) that can harden to form flesh like structures giving off the appearance of summoning things. She 'generates' 'ribbons' from the large bow on her back. also technically immortal but can be killed (permanently) in specific conditions. (doesn't have a name! will take suggestions)

    I_AM_TIRED
    2
    • Ha I took another for another character 23% again HA.

      A complete and utter jerk, has extremely good looks and uses it to bait people in. (I'll let you guess the rest). Brown hair and hazel eyes.

      Similar to previous character (made of HANF) only difference she will exploit that fact. She will modify her self to fit any needs, incredibly selfish. I'm going to be honest most of the time she plays a slightly antagonistic role, (also the one that traumatizes prev. char.). Also wields a cleaver or butcher knife (I dunno the difference) also made of HANF.

      I_AM_TIRED
      2
  • I got 27%

    I did this for my SIO (self-insert oc) for welcome home named Soba

    She's a Tanuki puppet who has Schizophrenia, Tics, and ADHD

    She's supposed to be a somewhat recreation of me (ex: Black hair, Schizo, ADHD, clumsy, etc.) I also made her fall in love with one of the main characters. She's possessed by a demon who can cover half of her body in toxic black ink with tentacles on her back. She's soft-spoken and barely talks, usually using hand gestures or her head.

    She's multilingual (She can speak Japanese, English, Spanish, German, and Russian) with her nationality being Japanese.

    I might add more, being that shes still in development, if anyone has tips for her/me, please do tell!

    ReggieACD
    1
  • Heyy, I got 56% for my character.
    It's perfect.

    But I still need to make her more of a mary-sue.

    So basically, i want to make a story that makes fun of the mary-sue and I'm having trouble coming up with a generic mary-sue name. Can anyone help me? Also, should I have her with blonde hair or brown hair? She'd be the type to complain about her "boring mousy brown locks", but I also feel like I've seen more mari-sues with blonde hair.

    Also, I made her middle and last names "Amy Sure", so I just need a first name hehe. I want to achieve ultimate character perfection.

    Thanks!

    clovercharms
    2
    • You should give her blonde hair, the Regina George kind of blonde hair.

      diamond4458
      2
    • Also, you should give her four names. The other two should me Diamond Rose

      diamond4458
      2
  • 25%
    Name: Tracei
    Species: Dog
    Gender: Female
    Age: 22

    Preferences: Anyone, as long as she trusts them or thinks they might like her back.

    Main fandom/originated fandom: Happy Tree Friends

    Birthday: May 18th, 1998

    Bio: Tracei is a 22 year old dog who enjoys relaxing, reading, and having fun with some coffee and friends. She did experience some negative experiences as a child/teen, as her parents separated when she was 12, and she started going to therapy a few months after. Whenever she hears yelling, screaming, overall threats, even if pretend, or anything that reminds her of her parents' divorce, she can't stop herself from harming the people who said/did these things, and once all is said and done, she immediately regrets it and starts crying. Her main weapon of choice is a knife, or pepper spray. She chose her father for custody, and personally liked it when they used to calm down and read a book or play a game. Her current crush is Flippy, a 22 year old bear. She mainly likes him because he reminds her of her father, who passed when she was 17. She also likes him for his overall personality. She hasn't asked him out to a date yet, as she is afraid he will reject her/start hating her.

    MochiTraceiChan
    2
  • Haha I got a 15% for my OC Azakumu, a wolf girl that was abandoned at a young age and was picked up by the local witch to be her apprentice after the witch found her in the dumpster. At kindergarten she meets her best friend Ivy. One day Azakumu accidentally got some magic in her eyes which turned both of her eyes red and to have greusome nightmares and hallucinations, which caused her to be afraid of the dark for all of her life. Around middle school she develops a crush on Ivy, and in their sophmore year of highschool, Azakumu confesses her feelings, but since Ivy is aromantic, they just decide to be together.

    I'm a sucker for happi endings, ok-

    Tsumii_0yasumi
    2
  • %24 percent a Mary Sue! Her name is Melanie and she is a teal alien. The whole story is about monsters but the quiz doesn't really know that- So if she was a normal human the percentage would probably be a little lower. Melanie was bullied as a child because she used to go to an all human school, as it was the only school in her area. Her father was able to get a new job as a reason to move so she could go to a place with people like her, a school of monsters! She meets other people and falls in lOvE with a white alien. Aka a legendary colored alien. As they have a whole ranking system depending on their color. She also meets a team of monsters who are basically trying to destroy the whole human race. Now i'll stop explaining before this gets too long :'D

    IzzyChxn
    2
    • When alien and human saliva mix, it creates a corrosive acid

      Damien Williams
      1
  • I got a 23% on my Original Character named Clarissa (she goes by Claire more often though.) I think my character was rated 23% pretty fairly, but she also isn't fully developed, I've actually been focusing on some side plots and side characters while trying to develop her more at the same time. (Here's some of her backstory and what I'm trying to accomplish.)

    So basically, this story started from a dream (I actually want to do the same thing when I have the money.) I had at the starting of 2020, some characters were going on a road trip. I don't know they're reasons, maybe they just wanted adventure? Anyways, they all had many flaws, one girl was fairly overweight and was discouraged about dating at all. But her group of friends helped her gain confidence and she actually ended up having some sort of love triangle with some already existing characters that were with them. And they basically just explored their universe. But I've come a long way with MY actual universe that has my OC Claire in it. Their government is trying it's best to keep its citizens safe, but some characters in my side plot discuss that more and what is going on behind closed doors. Claire and her friends come from all walks of life and want to find their place in the world. She brings a close friend of hers from school along the way with her. She has no mental illnesses so far, I'm not attracted to the idea of her (the protagonist) having a severe mental illness, side characters mostly represent the problems people face with certain mental issues. She is rather moody and can snap sometimes. She actually started as a self-insert character, but I'm slowly trying to make here, her own person and NOT just me. I think I would feel too vulnerable to have a character that close to myself being public anyways. Anyways, she is supposed to grow as a person at the end, as for other characters stay the same, the biggest problem I think I'm facing is not thinking of how the story ends... I know I won't be

    tuna_for_eddie
    1
  • Got around a 30% Mary Sue, didn't know what I was expecting and my character is still vastly unwritten for now, but that's alright.

    For those out of the loop, my character is Maru "Pluto" Realta. In the universe he comes from, planets and moons have vast concentrations of godly energy at their cores, called World Souls, which can be forged into god-like avatars. Maru is the World Soul of the dwarf planet Pluto. He is aware of a prophecy of a human-borne beast who ushers in an era of chaos and discord, bringing an end to all life in the solar system. And what does Maru, a human-borne beast do? He ushers in an era of chaos and discord, bringing an end to all life in the solar system, naively believing that ending humanity will put a stop to the prophecy, whilst at the same time fulfilling it. The story involves so many other characters, including Eris, Arrokoth, Sedna, Nemesis, Nibiru, Tyche, and so many others I could not name all of them here.

    Hope y'all enjoyed; I look forward to your thoughts.

    MechanicPluto24
    1
  • 26% is lower than I was expecting - these tests are unable to take a lot of context into the equation, so they tend to be inaccurate at best and should be taken with a grain of salt.

    Though I guess I know how to handle my overpowered, immortal energy beings well if all a major leader scores is 26% on a casual test when being one of the most powerful pieces in the game, so to speak.

    But then, I also just focus on making my characters be well-rounded people first and foremost, and worry about anything else later.

    The character I ran through this is an angel named Ambriel, who is the angel of harmony. Very powerful by mortal standards, and able to draw upon the energies of his home plane to augment his own when needed.

    He's also a sweetheart dork who gets stage fright and has been through his fair share of troubled and fantastic experiences.

    AuraGuard
    1
  • 25% - Human girl introduced in ER waiting room, time freezes, Grim f---ing Reaper appears and is like “Oh s---, you can see me” so they take her to the spirit world and she ends up meeting a bunch of gods that represent abstract human emotions (but not like the Greek gods or anything similar except for basic design inspiration). She’s got one prophecy that’s barely a prophecy that just says that “Hey, we got a god of birth and a god of dying, we need a god of living” and she ends up being that “god” after laying the previous god of living (antagonist) to rest.

    She’s got no trauma, but she is adopted. Named Iris; she’s got this brownish-blonde hair in the physical world, but because appearances change based on souls in the spirit world she has this light purple/lilac hair. Her eyes don’t change, and they’re brown. Literally nobody romances her because she’s aroace (dunno why there isn’t a “nobody falls in love with them” option and the minimum is 1 person) and nobody “tries to fix her” or whatever.

    She’s just good vibes in a pastel package surrounded by the immortal skittle squad.

    KBonBeebo
    3
  • "I received 18%, I consider it a good result. Well, of course, the grade isn't perfect, but I'll work on it and come back here. The character has nothing of mine, and is even of a different gender. His name is Baltazar, and he is a young adult at the age of 36 (looks his age). I didn't mention it earlier, but he is an elf (in his world, there are plenty of supernatural beings, and they keep their distance from humans). As for the history, I have everything done. His father was the leader of the Dashwood clan, and his mother was a warrior of the Teko clan. Unfortunately, she passed away during childbirth, and the father, who never wanted a child and didn't have time to take care of him, handed him over to his relative from another clan. When he grew up between two clans, a war broke out, and some children were afraid of him, while others treated him as an enemy. He tried to compensate for his genes with studying and hard work, but it didn't always work out. He was both intelligent and humorous, so he got along well with animals and excelled in academics, but he was clumsy in combat and magic studies. He was chosen as the guardian of dragons. (This role involves living away from the village in a large building and taking care of magical creatures.) He liked it because he had contact with magnificent creatures and could train with his new master, who was an elf. He continued his education until he became an adult. After a while, his master died, and he decided to take on his first student, who was a hybrid of a human and a wolf. Aster, as his student was called, was energetic, but it was hard for him to focus. Unfortunately, he died at the hands of a warrior from the Dashwood clan, and Baltazar blamed himself for it for the rest of his life. Some time passed, and he learned that he had siblings, but that's a long side story. Returning to the present. He decided to mentor another student, this time a hybrid of an elf and a deer. He trained him as best as he could. He on

    SunFlowerFern
    1
  • Got 20%, but for some reason, I thought it will be much higher

    I use an OC named Mark, he's a mere citizen and a writer in his world where there's an infinite amount of universes with it's own possibility, so Someone with power and unique ability isn't that much of a surprising thing. he's live in one universe that filled with advanced technology in 51st century. he's not actually the smartest, but he did own his own perk. His power, is not only could allowed him to see both future and past, but also changes the outcomes of the future as long as it's available. But due to this power, he was feared by his people, even by his family. Knowing that he will not fit in his world, he traveled into different world and starts his new career as a writer. he used his past seeing sight to write an accurate historical story. Most of his his story of course got to be the best selling book. But someday, he feels that he already out of ideas,even with the power to foresaw a past. So he uses a time machine from his original world, and traveled to the era of 2019. He eventually founds someone who finally understand him and want to befriend with him. He decide to stays in 2019 era and joins the group called "The Rules Breaker", mostly because they're the only one that accepts him as who he is(also there's more inspiration available to write a story)

    His power is not unlimited of course. It sometimes can't change the outcomes if said possibility are simply not available, this usually occurs if he met someone far stronger and faster to the point it will be impossible to fight even if he has an entire possibility to choose.He also only could change the possibility only if it's benefits himself, but he can't change the outcomes future of someone else, making it impossible for him to safe the others with this power. Not just that, he physically only equal to athletic human and compared to the world's he's living in, it's definitely not something to brag. In the past, He often always com

    Dimentio Marx
    1
    • He often always complain about his power and hoping that he lives in a universe where he doesn't own any power, or simply doesn't exist. But of course he came up with an idea to travel into different universe.

      He has a lover who almost leaving him due to her distrust about his power that she thought that he might be controlled her future, but eventually comeback after realising that if he indeed control her, then he could just chose the best way for him to convince her, but he just respect her choice to leave him.

      He might be a supporting characters but I'm kinda thought that it could be higher than 20%

      Dimentio Marx
      1
  • I did this for fun with my character. He started out as a self insert but has kinda evolved into his own thing, as well as a staple part of my storie and world building. I know this is old as s---, but I will take literally any opportunity to talk about my OC universe. He is part of the pantheon that I'm working on (and currently he's the only polished one) of gods. He's the God of saltwater (and can breathe only in salt water) and he is also in charge of marine life. He actually doesn't take the form of human very much anymore because after some things that go down in his pantheon (one of the gods wipes out the people who worshipped them) he and his pantheon fell from grace and lost the strength in their powers. Now he's unable to maintain a human form for long periods of time because condensing his original body into such a small form takes a lot of power. His normal look is a gigantic sea monster who slithers the depths. My current main OC for a webtoon I'm working on is actually a descendant of his, though he doesn't have really any powers other than the usual water-based stuff. Anyway, he's pretty pathetic especially when compared to the other gods, and him and the rest of his pantheon are looked down upon and ridiculed for the things that happened, which makes him hate interacting with other gods. His story revolves around him rebuilding his follower count and coming back into power in hopes of making life easier.

    SharkieReaper
    1
  • I got 20% I made an oc who is just really morally gray she's mishaps and many people hate her for being all around anoing she will help when it's convenient for her , she has my flaws such as dyslexia and asma and a constant habit of talking to her self she really doesn't have a backstory she just showed up one day and hopes between worlds to mes with the casts of the shows such as pranking harry Potter or anoin deku to his braking point and just likes having fun

    Sora lee
    3
  • I got 17%! Firstly, my character's an OC for a story I'm making. He's not human, but nobody in the story is human, either. Does that count as a Mary/Gary Sue trait? He's called Alexei Bane, or Alex - he prefers this - for short. He has blue eyes and white hair (unnaturally colored hair is common in the world though), and he's 20 years old. He's a hero in the story - but it's a job. Kind of like the heroes in MHA or the ADA in BSD?

    He does attract attention when he goes out, because he's known as a celebrity. He has a reputation for being an angel of sorts, his looks play a part in this, though in actuality he's quite emotional and angry.

    He does have a boyfriend (bisexual), no he hasn't slept with other people a lot because he has a boyfriend and neither of them are interested in a polyromantic relationship. For his parents, they're dead. They were former heroes who were famous, and though they had a good reputation, he was pressured to become a hero by them. He's traumatised by them and has difficulty expressing himself and venting it healthily, but he's seeking out help with a therapist. Due to his trauma, he has anxiety (coming from a person who has anxiety I'm not adding this in because iT's CoOl or whatever). He takes safe space with his boyfriend.

    He does have a supernatural power, but everybody has them in the story. He has teleportation and is quite good at hand to hand combat. He dreams of being an artist, but is scared of the backlash if he quits his job so suddenly. He's the victim of a tragedy where multiple heroes and civilians were massacred by a criminal group. He did suffer some injuries, however he survived. His parents were also killed from this, and he feels guilt for being glad at the moment that he heard that they died (his parents did all the things you're not supposed to do to a living being that starts with an a and ends with an e). Due to this and his trauma, he became a hero and constantly hates it.

    Would this count as a Mary/Gary Sue

    coffeewriter
    1
  • Huh, a 20% not bad... I was honestly expecting a lot more because of how kinda O.P. (not a lot but still enough to be mentioned) my persona is.

    Okie, SO! A little bit of context for how my persona was created (this will be really important in a sec). I can't have dreams that look realistic(e.g. lucid dreams, ones with real place or time settings e.x.) or else I'll have a Nightmare and wake up crying (roughly about 4 times out of ten) because of this I often have dreams that are in the fictional world and look like the art style as well. I have a type of photographic memory that allows my mind to remember things like this, but also alter the image if my mind doesn't like it(why I can dream in an art style). NOW this is the cool part. I can remember most of my dreams and because of this I remember what a character looked like too. I normally play as (or am represented)in said dream as a persona named Omega Bites.

    Omega Bites is what I'd like to call my subconscious self as that's how they were created, by my dreams. They are a 7'0 to 7'6 (when on all fours) feet tall fluffy,gold and Blush-peach Pantherine (Wild cat, typically lion, or other with bird or other animal wings) Other Cat (a jumble of wild cat's so messed up ya don't know what type it is) with white wings, the tips turning to a rainbow like color. They have a freakishly long tail with a silver-gray mechanical claw-like mechanism on the end. The end of their tail can open up to reveal syringes and potion-like bottles. Said syringes can be fired at an impressive speed much like a bullet would. Omega Bites can also shape-shift and is mostly lurking, watching, or engaging with the main character's adventure in my dreams, since I typically don't like to make my dreams all about myself. Omega has a small,brown, pouch-like infinity bag wrapped around their neck. They often apply to cartoon logic when dealing with world physics or types of magic. Speaking of which! Omega's magic is pretty weird, although it's most

    Omega Bites
    1
  • I got 22%, which I am unsure if it is accurate.

    Starting with his pros, Orion is a cat (my story is in perspective of cats). He has a sister who is essentially a governor of a colony. Theres a slim chance in one of the colonies that the cats are born with three different powers. His specifically are invisibility, healing and strength. Peacemakers are what is kind is called, and they claim their kittens almost three days after birth, to be trained as one of their own.

    Orions personality; he doesnt like help (Ill explain more on that in a moment.)Hes usually stressed about something, or irritated. He doesnt show up like that, but it can quickly escalate if someone doesnt understand what he is messaging.

    Orion was acting very strange when he was first brought into the peacemakers, and they soon discovered that he was dumb (not stupid dumb, speaking dumb)

    Though the book, Orion has to use morse code with blinking. Only about 25% of the cats in the series can understand him, so hes constantly mouthing words and repeating himself slowly. His main weakness really is that he needs help with communicating quite often, which causes him a lot of problems in the later chapters.

    Overall, its like hes the smartest person in a math class but has adhd, so fails anyway.

    One more pro I should mention; he is a master of healing, using his powers to assist him.

    HalfMoonrise
    1
    • Do you mean he's mute?

      Also, you never mentioned any cons? So now I can't decipher what these points should be pros to hahaha

      But it sounds like a really good arc, has a lot of potential, especially if you manage to make the cat thing fit into the real world somehow (like people's regular house cats are secretly superheroes), and really get some plot obstacles going with this healing power of his (maybe he has doubts about being good enough to use them or something, it's a good chance for character development and story building, try to tie it together with the rest of the story so that it all makes sense and feels meaningful)

      metaphisto
      2
  • The OC used is part of an original story. She is one of three main characters, who are part of a group of five friends. She's minorly physically disabled and has a fear of heights. She has wings because she's not human, in a world full of not humans. She's 16, though I may change her age as she's only 16 because she was original a human fan character for a game and most of the game's protagonists are 16. She's introverted but has no problem interacting with people she knows well and trusts. She tends to bottle up her emotions and wants to show no weakness. She goes through an emotional journey throughout the course of the story showing her it's okay to show weakness and stuff like that, but she still continues to bottle up her emotions and tries not to show weakness because she doesn't like dealing with emotions. Her fear of heights is bad and often weighs the group down, and the group is usually annoyed. She's lesbian, and the other characters are a straight guy, a biromantic girl, a aromantic boy, and a toric (attracted to men) non binary person. Her only possible love interest in the group is the Bi woman, but neither see the other like that and she doesn't get to know any other people well in the course of the story, so doesn't get a love interest. Her parents divorced but she still keeps in touch with both of them and has a good relationship with them.

    Do you think she's a mary sue?

    EighthWonder
    1
  • I got 25% wow

    I have a character who is recognized fairly easily but not in their first appearance since the first appearance of that character is in a crowded lunch room where everyone who is royalty eats (character is a queen) she did have a tragic past which gave her PTSD and a fear of knives. A lot of people fell in love with her because they think she is hot but she never really likes any of them. (most are fanboys/fangirls/fanthems) probably since she isn't ever gonna give her ghost hubby up. She does have purple eyes but they are pretty common as most people on her planet have weird eye or hair colors. Her PTSD is never blamed for her actions and she is pretty selfish sometimes. She actually only befriended the M.C to get revenge on her enemy, who the M.C dislikes. However, she does have a nice side that the M.C gets through to before the big bad fight. She never had a bad past with her parents so no need to apologize to them. That's about it

    Zoey the weirdo
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  • 17%

    Ako, my character, is a bratty noble (9th in line for the throne) who, upon realizing how disliked she is, decides that she would like to be a hero. She goes to a tavern, talks to an old dude, and after getting him drunk convinces him to take her on as an apprentice quest-master.

    She has two primary love interests, her former fiance and one of the adventurers in her party. She does sleep around a bit, and flirt a lot, but I think that's just part of her nature. Ako was there, the only one awake, when the old quest master died. She and he and become friends, and often acted like siblings. She has a strong dislike of messy things, and keeps her disgust of peasants who she sees as "worthless" very thinly veiled. Ako definitely has made friends with a fair few people in the story, but I'm trying to hint that at least a few of them are there for her money or a friends with benefits sorta thing. Plus she makes most of her friends for similar reasons.

    I think the reason I was worried she'd seem like one is because she is never, ever awkward. Otherwise she really doesn't give off the vibe, right? She's cocky and doesn't seem phased by much, so that could definitely be it.

    (Any feedback?)

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    • Honestly, I dont think you need to worry about making your character more awkward, especially if Ako is an independent, overconfident gal with enough problems already. Awkward edd is only a good trait if you think it would bring something more to the story, but so far it sounds like Ako is a very proactive character who wouldnt fit that trait anyway. Shes bossy, entitled, and grew up getting etiquette and social skills drilled into her head; there shouldnt be much room for awkwardness in how she approaches others.

      If by awkwardness you mean occasions where Ako makes a misstep or blunders her way into trouble, then you only need to use her existing faults to show that happening. Just from her actions it doesnt like Ako is lazy or complacent. She sees a problem, she fixes it. Maybe while shes learning the ropes Ako gets a little TOO ambitious, perhaps by taking on a foe or a job thats more than she can handle. Maybe she has to be saved by someone, or she gets another person hurt, and that motivates Ako to reevaluate and try harder. Is that helpful?

      2nd point of advice: you mention Ako sleeping around. Now, theres nothing wrong with that in a character, but I have to ask WHY is she sleeping around? Is it important to the story? Is the story focused more on Akos relationships or on Akos character development as a hero? Asking sincerely, does that fit her background and the rest of her personality? Only you can decide.

      I just want to point out, as a grown woman myself, that sexual content or -adult themes- do not necessarily make a story more -mature-. Similarly, I find that women who give themselves away too freely tend to have certain underlying problems with their own self worth, or their ability to connect with others. Does Ako have those issues? And if she comes from nobility, where prudishness and purity might be expected, then where does Ako get her notions of promiscuity? Just some questions to consider.

      All in all though, Ako sounds promising!

      Glucranz
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