kisses part one | Comments

I think that these boys, Christian and Jason, deserve a physical description at the very least. It's very annoying when I read story quizzes like this and I don't get the character descriptions... it would also be nice if you put more detail into each paragraph question and used "" so that nobody has to guess where one character finishes talking and the other starts. Sorry, I know it's a lot. Besides all this, it's a good story.

Ok I have a few suggestions. First of all you need to use quotation marks. I was very confused. Second I must know who this Chris is he just comes out of no where with no explanation. That is all otherwise great m.

otherwise the story is pretty good

you spelled fiancee wrong.

i love ya sis!

mb123, lov ur quizzes!

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