Is Your Character a Mary Sue? | Comments

I got 15% yay! Well I worked on this oc for more that an year so it would be pretty dissapointing if I would've got more hehe. I mean she is 14 and sometimes smart, most of the times not when needed, and when she is out with people she tends to try way too hard to look cool and it comes off as annoying or even cringy. Oh and her name is Saorsa and she is romanian. Tell me ur opinion about her! <3

23% - not to bad for a character (& story) who was made up on the spot that was very much inspired by a song (It's My Bad - Nico Collins on SoundCloud go check it out, its amazing) so it isnt really original material but I feel like Im going to have fun with this character/story!

He doesnt have a name yet - but he is a teenager and goes by he/him pronouns and is panromantic/pansexual (demiromantic). In the story, he gets cheated on by his girlfriend with his best friend for the millionth time. To put it shortly, he has a mental breakdown, and in said mental breakdown, he murders them both.

For the majority of the story, he is on the run from the police but not before he drags two of his closest friends (names not decided) for the ride. Not sure to end off the story, kind of just a spur of a idea.

17%

my character is sorta like a god n stuff so i'm surprised i got below 20 lol.

he's like the person who controls everything, and by everything i mean storylines n stuff lol. they're each represented by locks and are usually open which means it's a good sign and everything is going according to plan.

but then there's a girl who "respawns" every time she dies, like a glitch in the story, which would make the lock of the story close. but she gave this "power" to one of her friends when she started getting tired of it. (she got rid of it, then died in a car crash lol.) her friend, connor, found out another glitch with it, and was able to travel to different storylines, and in many different eras or years i guess? (this all takes place in my own made-up country called sinan lol.) every time connor traveled to a different storyline, it shut the lock of the storyline, which were sorta hard to open back up. when a lock is shut, strange "not normal" things would happen, like paranormal stuff but without ghosts, and if it's not open soon, then it could get progressively worse. in a storyline about 5 years later, this guy from japan finds out about it from an anonymous forum connor posted on, and wants to broadcast it across sinan on one of the biggest radio stations across the country, but it's mostly an atheist/ agnostic country, so..

and to think i came up with all of this from a deltarune theory i heard lol.

I did this quiz before but this time I did it with an old Undertale OC, Temikka. I made her in 2016 when I was 8-9. basically, take it a temmie, make it a furry. make her hair cover one of her bright pink eyes and put a completely natural bright pink streak in her hair. maker her wear the colors blue and purple only, and f--- it make Asriel fall in love with her. make her weapons similar to Sans and make Chara her GREATEST ENEMY. Surprisingly she only got 35% Mary Sue. I would explain more of her backstory but I dont feel like typing a lot rn.

i got 27%, i blame the way i made sirens work in my story.they have strange eyes that are seperated in two, and change from siren form to human form a lot. they're kiinda hated by everyone because they're seen as a big danger and are meant to be killed on sight, or turned into the police to be executed. i also put being a siren as disease for her, because thats exactly how she views it, a curse that she was given by another person at a young age. i wasnt sure if she would get high or low, because she is decently powerful and has a depressing backstory, but her main flaws all come in through her personality, she constantly puts down herself, not motivated to do anything, and she ends up being mean to the people she cares the most about. she's unstable and thinks she's a burden on her friends (not her family because she left them cause they're just kinda s---ty people).

According to this, Eve Rowley aka Ether the ghost-girl is 20% Mary Sue. Nice.

'Is your character out of shape, and stays that way throughout the entire story?' (#43)

She FIGHTS GHOSTS for a living! I'm gonna go with no XD

A note:
On #14, you forgot the 'None' option.

18 percent Mary-Sue.

That's accurate; she's a fan character, and she is a bit OP at first, but later when she's not cursed she loses most of her magical powers; but she's still pretty good with weapons. :)

"Your character is 10% a Mary Sue!"

I was expecting a little higher of a score considering how she is, then again I think what makes her interesting isn't what she can do but her attitude XD. Love writing the underdogs XD

The oc i used for this quiz is Adrian Yves Rosewine. He is a human, 6,4 feet tall, hazelnut medium long hair and natural indigo eyes. He is actually 400 years old but he looks like in his late 20s. For the backstory, i don't know how to execute it but i decided to make his backstory to be an orphan who gets adopted by Orphanage and actually the head of the orphanage is actually a fallen angel and told him that he is destined to be more than he was, the prophecy told her that Adrian will become either a hero or a villain. His power which in this universe i called it a "Stern" is named "All For The Memories" which is he able to manipulate memories, he could wipe all of one individual's memories of their past, create a fake memory, and stuff. He can't die as long people still remember him, so when people know him that will become a new memory so when he get stabbed, killed, choked, and etc he can't die as long there are lot of people remember him that's why he can't aged and he still alive until now. (Actually, this character is mostly inspired by Black swan from hsr, Fyodor from Bungou Stray dogs, Kagaya from Demon Slayer.) And imagine what if 8B people know him, he will never be die.

aye i know this is worded poorly just because i make ocs don't mean i'm a writer so like it might be confusing n messy :D

7% garysue

I used my character Hana Amjad who after being kicked out when he was 17 for not "following god" found his own definition of god and began to believe that he was in fact a messenger of god and that god basically spoke through him to correct the world of their sins and purify the way humans acted and thought. he started a commune when he was about 20 where he would find youth and people around his age in dark places and invite them to a place where he promised family, support and happiness, only for them to preach his crazy ideas and crazy ideals for how people should think and act, when he becomes angry due to people not listening or things not going his way he becomes abusive towards his followers because in his mind he is superior to any other person in the world. he is also in a polyamorous relationship with a man and a woman which is pretty healthy for a man who mentally manipulates everyone around him

23%? Yea, I get that. they are based off of Nightmare Sans from dreamtale but have the design of a character from Sky, Children Of The Light. I try to make them as realistic as possible -v-

I got 13% mary sue, lol, it's funny how it says to make my character more pretty but she is already really pretty, idk if i should add more to her or something:

Name: Sel.
Nationality: Japanese.
Hair color: Black.
Skin color: extremely pale lol.

Eye color: Blue and green, change color based on how she's feeling. (Only extreme emotions)

Weakness: water.

Powers: Pyrokinesis and the typical grim reaper stuff.

Parents: Queen of fire and grim reaper.

Fear: Hydrophobia (fear of water since it can kill her)

Personality: pretty much a yandere, since she starts off nice but ends up even killing someone. And she's also mean af with people she doesn't know lol.

Her being mean comes from her past, she ran away and got captured, she promised to herself that it will never happen again when she escaped, so now she's more defensive.

Siblings: 2 brothers (1 dies) and 1 sister (mean af and abandons her)

She's also a pyromaniac (I have done my research) it came from her always seeing people lighting up things from her window. And she's also fire-inmune btw, she acts like a fire in every way, she can even melt ice lol.

She also has bipolar disorder, making her eyes change from yellow (extremely happy) to blue (extremely sad), to sometimes purple which represents the psychosis side of it.

I'm planning on making a short version of the story with a lot of comedy (in a nutchell) so yeah-

Ive done this quiz so many times but most of my characters get 15 or lower. My lowest being 10%. I feel like I should fix her?

Valerie Decon (De-kin)

Shes 25 when it starts. Grew up in a household of several children due to her father constantly marrying and divorcing several women so he can get more children to experiment on ( so original, I know.) All the children have similar abilities varying slightly between them unless their twins, which she is (Twin brother). She shares a link with her brother and on their birthday every year they have to fight until one dies or it hits midnight, ending their birthday. All the sibling eventually get separated after their father cause this apocalyptic world from an experiment gone wrong. Shes trying to live in the new world she was thrown into at 16 and avoid her siblings. Some hate her, about two dont and some dont give a damn if shes dead of alive. She, however, inherited a disease from her mother. Its similar to Hemophilia but she has episodes of blurry vision, blood splurging everywhere and migraines. She has extreme OCD, and can come across as cold, brutish, and b----y at times. Well, shes cold and stiff pretty much all the time. Again, didnt get a high score but I feel like I still need to change her in order for her to be...idk better?

I put my boyfriend in here and he only got a 15% lmao, I know he's not a demigod or anything but he's the most interesting person I've ever met

19%

Honest to god, I wasn't really having a high limit but I would do a bit of changing him if he was higher than 50% mary sueness. I like this. I actually use a character from the movie to roleplay and used him. He is pretty good, I can't really change him but I do have headcanons. ^w^

"Your character is 18% a Mary Sue!"
Good to know.

I didn't get any bashing, but it was still a lot of fun to take. Can tell you worked hard on this, it's very specific. I'll definitely be sharing this with fellow fan-fiction writers... great job!

(I'm not a native english speaker so sorry in advance)

I got 16% and I'm kinda embarrassed because I'm a big hater of Mary Sue characters ^^"

I have this character since 2017. It's my fursona and like many furries I want him to be a better version of myself

He's one of many benkarts of some dragon (witch are" The Rich" of this world) but he's not special there in fact so many that it's kinda annoying, but it's impotent for the plot. He was found one the "outside" in one of survivals villages during routine expedition, now he's 26 and living with his step father in postapo world destroyed by climate change in one of many underground scientists occupied volts, (it's a glob wide operation which aims to mined most of the metals from earth and send them to moon where're currently built bases and rocket to eventually send The Rich who are waiting on earth orbit to Mars for good) he's a leader of small team of bioengineers (which is not such a big deal bc there is like 2000 ppl in here and half of them are scientists so there is like 30 team leaders and even more ppl in "the main council"

But about him: he's good at cooking, likes to play on electric guitar but is not very good at it, have a ton of plants in his room and keeps a lot of modified insects as a hobby, he's not really empathetic, workaholic, pedantic, germofobic, trying to not fall for anyone (but sucks at it), usually stoik at work, but swears a lot when irritated, and I think it's funny bc at home he and his father always are yelling at each other for no reason just to be mean, but they love each other and they know that bc they spend a ton of quality time together xD

But the plot is that he discover that there is big black market for "dragon parts" and his father is heavily involved and was using him for that, so his trying to escape the volt but his only friend and lover gets killed in the process (he was part dragon too) so now with minimal equipment he's trying to get to nearest volt (with is like in th

I couldn't get an accurate result because in the backstory option there was nothing that said "they were the one that caused the pain" lol. I was doing the main antagonist who is a serial killer. She doesn't have any trauma, she just...wants to be a serial killer. 54% mary sue, so apparently she's well-balanced...I hope that's true XD

I used my character Florian Alderwood, (got 9% with him) he was raised in a nuclear biracial family, (french father and a black mother,) as an only child! His parents split up when he was eight and he was raised mostly by his mom. His parents primarily spoke French when Florian was a child and so he learned that first, but hes fluent in English too, (learned it from his mom after his parents split up.) but now has an accent that he definitely plays up because he thinks its sexy. Hes a bit above average intelligence-wise, but really isnt a very morally correct person. He goes to Cambridge for college, and meets his boyfriend, Anton, there. Anton is even more of an a--hole than florian, but florian is good at socializing and Anton isnt. Florian wants to move back to the states, and Anton agrees, so the pair move. Florian finds out that Anton has a hell of a grudge on a lawyer there, and so Florian decides to help him out with that. Now, Florian is an insufferable flirt and is extremely flashy all of the time, but this lawyers partner is doubly obnoxious, and the lawyer is sick of it. So in flounces Florian, decides to sleep with the guy, and then poisons him! A dash of arsenic in the vodka. He calls up Anton, who shoots the other guy, and Anton and Florian take off, crossing as many police jurisdictions as possible. Unfortunately for their master plan, having sex with someone tends to leave DNA. And Florians DNA was already in the system for a minor offense a few years earlier, so it really didnt take too long for them to get caught. Florian was charged with accessory to murder, (it really was Antons plan, Florian was just willing to do the dirty work for him,) and he gets charged with 2 years in the psych ward and 8 in the state penitentiary. Hes quite persuasive, however, and gets out on parole after 5. He never goes on to offend again, and just works white collar jobs for the rest of his life! Hes a fun little prick.

I got 11% for one, and 15% for the other, which is pretty good in my opinion.

The first is 25 year old Aarin Estrada. He has medium length black hair, green eyes, is 6'2", and Hispanic. He's very smart, but is also lazy, and it's hard to get him motivated if he's in a depressive state. He has suicidal thoughts and self-destructive behaviors (unsafe driving, sleeping with many people, self-harm). His mother died from cancer a few years before the story starts, and his father has dementia and is in a nursing home. He works part time as a sort-of investigator. Aarin houses the second character, Keith Williams.

Keith is 21 years old (only a year older than me), and has messy black hair and blue eyes. He's 5'5", and is half-Korean, half-English. He's hardworking, but is also childish and irresponsible. He can also be very violent under stress. Keith lived on the streets until Aarin helped him. He was molested for years by someone who took care of him, and is has a fear of intimacy because of it (genophobia). He's helping Aarin with his cases. They end up growing close while working on one case that has to do with how Keith ended up on the street. A lot of the story is centered around how they both help "fix" what's bad about the other (Keith and his distrust of everyone, and Aarin with his self-hatred).

I've had these characters for a few years and they mean a lot to me, so I'm glad they don't sound to cliche, lol.

My character was male so I don't know if that affected the score at all but I did get 14% I think I would have gotten lower if I didn't say he had a tragic incurable disease. I only said that because he has sickle cell disease, which can make you go blind or lose your vision in severe cases, which is why I needed him to have it because he starts losing vision around the age of 15 and I didn't want it to be for a random reason. His name is souls and he's from a universe I made up with a whole giant story-line. Basically, everybody has their own unique ability called a Soul Fire and some people have more powerful soul fires, these people are called destines or, destiny's, souls is a destiny and that's there are prophecies about him (And every other destiny) and that doesn't mean he's royalty either because he gets forced into purgatory for accidentally killing of half of the Kalidathian army, (Tee side in a war fighting for magic rights) and now he's forced to live on an asteroid in space big enough to have an atmosphere. Later on in the story, he does get infected by a darkness parasite, a thing that comes from the darkness, a powerful force slowly eating off the universe. (Basically, every villain in the story is a result of darkness) and so now he is slowly losing control of his own body as the darkness begins to take over his mind. When he does go fully mad, he ends up starting a "Revolution" that kills off 20% of the population of the known universe. After a while, he does end up getting killed by a huge chunk of ice smashing him so. kArMa HaHa. Souls was a very optimistic person before he was infected after he was very cruel and even attempted killing his apprentices caretaker. And basically after his death, the universe starts to go downhill, one by one each destiny dies off leaving one left who gets frozen by darkness and flung to a nearby planet, long story short the darkness wins and destroys that universe, creating the one we're in today!

I got 16% Mary Sue, and I honestly thought it'd be higher.

Basically, my character is a wolf named Abilene. She's tiny and has a high-pitched voice even though she's 35, and always says it's because of her breed. She's an amazing healer, but also blind. She has special fireflies, their light changes color when it lands on something, so she can see it. The fireflies respond and do what she says. She has no unnatural colors or anything like that. My story involves some other characters, like Dakota and Skull who are German brothers that admire her skill. Natalie and Natalia who are twins, Natalie is really stupid, but Natalia is mute so can't really speak up against the retarded things she says. There's also Starla and Mocha, who aren't really main characters but appear in every other scene since they're her neighbors. Abilene is continuously shipped with Mocha by Starla, and Abilene is always extremely disgusted by it. Mocha is a pup and Abilene looks like a pup so... God, okay. This is too long, lemme just- Bye.