My awesome writer friends,please come here 3:
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Thread Topic: My awesome writer friends,please come here 3:
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Wow...the story is really good so far. :)
Should I post what I have so far? Or wait till I'm finished? -
AZY Newbieok
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POSTY POSTY POSTY!
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AZY Newbiehey biance wats up
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Okay. :)
Progluge-
After the nuclear war happened,people have been mutated. You're probably thinking of a different kind of mutated like with four arms or one eye. The kind of mutated I'm talking about is with unatural eye colors and powers. There is 5 different eye colors with different powers. The 5 colors are purple,orange,pink,mint green,and yellow. Purple eyes have the power to control fire,water,air,and earth. Orange eyes have the power of strength and speed. Pink eyes have the power of telapathy. Mint green eyes have the power to shapeshift. And yellow eyes have no power. Peopl don't know why yellow eyes have no powers but everyone else does.
Chapter 1-Olivia,Naomi,and Josh were walking down the street. They all had yellow eyes. "I think it's weird how people with yellow eyes don't have powers but everyone else does." Naomi said to Olivia and Josh. Olivia sighed as she looked at the ground with a sad face. "What matters what's on the inside." Josh smiled. "Who needs powers?" Naomi smiled brightly. "Exactly!" she said. Olivia sighed agian. She was still staring at the ground. "Olivia,please cheer up." Josh said. "Fine" Olivia replied,faking a smile.
That's what I have so far. So...opinions? Anything I need to add? Anything I need to take away? :) -
I think it's turning out well but I want to hear other people's opinions
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biance that story rocks!!! mine is a fail XD i'm so ashamed...
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oh! one suggestion! not that you dont have like a MILLION but everything can use more detail! i like to keep that in mind while writing! ;D
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Okay. :) Thank you!
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Any other opinions? :3
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awesome :D
umm...they're being hunted by others who were mutated? -
Okay, Not to be annoying, but I think you should get rid of the prolouge and lead into the eye/powers thing. Y'know?
Just tweak the begging of the first chapeter.
But it's okay if ya dun wanna. -
@ Kistune: Thanks. :3
@ Ozzy: I like having a prolouge because it sorta give a back story and stuff. :)
What special power should the yellow eyes have at the end? It should be a really special and unique power. -
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Thought yellow eyes have all powers?
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