Shadow's castle
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Thread Topic: Shadow's castle
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I hate my self NewbieThe mystery of the missing diamond ring
chapter 1 the mystery of the ring
My name is alyssa but my friends call me ally and I'm 16 years old. I live in L.A and even though there is a lot of crime in L.A it's still home. CRAP!!!! IM LATE FOR SCHOOL I quickly pack my school bag and I fly down the stairs and head to the kitchen and as fast as I can, I make my morning smoothie and i'm out the door and off too school. I arrive at school and I fly to my English class I quickly sit in my seat and as soon as the teacher turns around she sternly saids " Alyssa you're late " " i'm sorry mama " I said hoping that she would forgive me " do you mind telling me why you are late " " yes mama" I said shamefully " well you see mama I accidentally overslept" " ok just don't let it happen again please know open your book to chapter 14 " " yes mama it won't happen again" after English class was lunch I had a salad as I do everyday as I was talking to my friends I got a text from my mom the text said " honey have you seen my diamond ring ? I left the house to go too the store to get a few things and I came back and the ring was gone " I replied " no mom i'm sorry I haven't seen your ring " " ok "" sigh" " I hope I find it that ring was 1006000$ " " holly crap! that much " "sigh yes that much" "ok i'll be home in 10 minutes" "ok please hurry" I get home and I find my mom basically hyperventilation rockin back in forth saying my ring my ring my 1006000$ ring.
chapter 2 the mystery begins
"I need to find that diamond ring" I said very afraid because my dad gave her that ring almost before they got divorced I never really knew my dad he left when I was 6 I was old enough to know what was going on I was supposed to be sleeping but I couldn't and i overheard my parents fighting over something and then I heard a loud slam and I knew that he wasn't coming back soon I heard my mother crying and running up the stairs and I quickly ran back to my bed and pretended that I was sleeping.When my mom walked in to check on me I pretended that I woke up and then she said "hey honey how much did you hear" I tried to act like I didn't know what she was talking about "how much did I hear of what" she looked at my and said "honey you don't have to pretend that nothing happened come on I know you were awake" and then I can't remember the rest. When I turned around my mom was still in the corner still rocking back and forth. so I go over to here and say "hey mom you ok" she replied "yes honey im fine" "thats good but you do know that you have to make a decision" " yes honey i'll think about it"
chapter 3 the design has to be made
When I saw my mom just rocking back and forth I decided to call the cops and reported the missing ring when I told my mom about this idea she turned around and said "no" and then I responded with " yes mom it has to be solved" "no! alyssa" I replied " yes mom don't you want to see your ring again" "yes of course i do but i am scared of the answer there going to give me" (sigh) "I know but we can't just overlook this we have to look it directly in the eye" then my mom finally gave in and said "ok" "yes finally" so I called the cops and said "yes hi I would like to report a missing diamond ring" the boy and I say boy because he sounded like a teenage boy and I found out that he was a teenage boy his name was zack and he was 17 years old and I asol found out that he went to my school to and a fun fact about me is that if I see a cute boy that is my age or a little older than me than I well be like a cat and pounds to falling in love with them so you better believe that when I saw him I recently went to go introduce myself I said " hi my name is alyssa and im 16" and I know what your thinking is she trying to be cute? yes I was trying to act cute it didn't go the way I plain so they investigated the house and they found a key on the floor and it was our spare house key but only one that knows where the spare house key is my friend and wait oh no and by the time I got done thinking the cops were leaving but Zack stayed and he was writing something on a piece of paper and then he gave it to me the note said dear ally stay up until 9:30 and there will be a surprise at you window p.s. here's my number (603) 189 - 3041 so I looked up and mothed the word yes and then he left. When 9:30 came around I heard something tapping on my window my mom was sleeping so i went over to the window and there stood Zack so i snuck out of my window and me and Zack ran off to his very lovely old fashion truck and we drove away and then like 14 minutes later I get a text from my mom that says "ally" "ally" "ally please answer my text" and then I get a text saying " first my ring and now my daughter oh hell no i'm going to go find my baby" " hang on baby mamas coming" I immediately texted her bake saying "no mom please im safe" and then I got a strange text saying " if you ever want to see this precious ring aging meat me at 3:30am tomorrow" I replied very nervously " who is this " the mysterious number called me I pick up and said "hello who is this" and in a stern voice said "I ask the question and you know who I am" I was very confused and I don't know anyone with that number Zach noticed that I was very scared so he asked me if I was ok and I said "yes i'm ok" I lied.
chapter 4 The start of the picture unfolding
Minutes past and I couldn't stop thinking about that number and what that person said so after a while I asked Zac if he could take me home he said yes but first he pulled over and I got really scared and I asked him what he was doing and he said "before I take you home I need to do something first" I said "what is that" and he unbuckled and began to get out of his seat and he leaned my seat back my heart was beating like a drum faster and faster he got closer and closer and closer he leaned into me his face got closer to mine his lips going in to touch mine his lips traveling down to my neck and all of a sudden I lost track of everything and I just let him kiss me and then he stopped and he didn't turn around so I asked him "what are you doing " he replied “ were going to my surprise” I started to get a little used to him and so I said “ok let's go” so the he “said “ok were here just around the corner here put this on” he handed me a blindfolded and led me out of the car and into what feels like a house and then he said “ok i'm going to help you up some stars just follow the sound of my voice ok?” “ok” we go up the stars I heard his smoot heart renchen voice say “ok i'm going to remove your blindfolded” he removed my blindfold and we were in a room so I asked him “where are we” he responded “we are in my room now be a good girl and get on the bed” -
Francium NoviceWas the ring made of francium
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I hate my self Newbiethats my book read it
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Francium NoviceLooks boring cause it’s about some rich privileged brat who lost a ring and kissed some idiot 🌚🌚🌚🌚
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I hate my self Newbiejust read it it takes a twist
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Francium NoviceThere’s no francium in the story
How about a plot twist where suddenly she discovers some francium and the guy cheats on her so she throws francium and water at his face and he dies -
Yeah their was a twist
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Francium NoviceTo me it was tl;dr cause it was so long and monotonous
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I hate my self Newbieno not Zack the back round of the story is I wroght this story because I have a cruch on a boy in my school and this is how I want it to go exseped without the steeling
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Francium NoviceWho cares about crushes and relationships good god you’re like 12
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Ahah francium in my picture
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And your an element
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Wow really 🌝
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I hate my self Newbiei'm 14 think you and im sure the sadow drago knows what im takling about
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There’s more important things to worry about than a crush like dude seriously
Focus on your grades bro not your boys
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