REVISION ADVICE
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Thread Topic: REVISION ADVICE
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Aww, thank you!
Where did Bambi go? -
Roeth
Book 2: The family blood
5 years later, Roeth tries to find out more about her family, it starts out that she goes to an old guy the boy's dad told her about, who was the friend of Sir Ernest Halbert, Roeth's grandfather, and he was a vampire killer, though he was a werewolf, they had killed vampires together, this old guy lives faraway because he was a werewolf and didn't want to kill people, so he told her his story, then one day she finds the diary of Matilda Ormond, whom reveals a part of her family history, she was Ernest's wife, and there was a ruby necklace in her diary, then, she finds out she's a vampire when she kills the boy's sister, he takes her at midnight and ties her to a cross, she's dying but cuts the rope she was tied to, but now a werewolf is coming to get her. The old guy!
She survives and kills him (very difficultly) she buries him in a graveyard next to her grandpa's grave -
Did everyone leave? First I was asked to say the story then they all left!
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im here
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Hi Bunnies, I was almost going to leave. WTF was all that about?
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i here.
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Where were you?
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idk, i already heard the story, so i kept silent
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That's why I didn't want to say the story, because there were people that had already heard it and I didn't want to bore them.
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im not bbored
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i was willing to hear what other ppl thought of your book
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Good, but the people who had asked me had gone so let's talk about something else.
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ok, do you have any pets
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Yes, two cats, one called Mince, one called Ollie.
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nope.
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