Just so attached -me
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Thread Topic: Just so attached -me
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petunia_24 NewbieOn my wrist was a piece of sharpie artwork. The most perfectly shaped heart and a J for Jason, otherwise known as cutie and his brown hair that doesnt cover his glasses that emphasize his bright crystal blue eyes. I wore not a jacket, not a long sleeve but a tank and my preferred fit jeans. Its like my brain was trying to tattle on me. I knew when I walked into class that someone was bound to find out and tell him.
Suddenly I was hunting for a jacket but of course who wears a jacket on a hot day like this. I didnt want anyone to find out I like him so I just covered it with my other hand. Suddenly karma slapped me in the face. Jason walked in with all his stuff and Mrs. Jennet, our science teacher, signaled him towards the empty chair next to me. I heard he was being moved into our class for being in trouble all the time. But I thought it was just part of the mainstream rumor loop. He looked over and I squeezed my wrist to the point that sweat could possibly be noticeable. He sat down and went straight to lazy mode. Slouched in his chair, feet stretched out, ankles crossed and his hands bouncing a pencil on the desk. Every time the pencil hit the desk his muscles somehow seemed more noticeable but he wasnt too buff. It was like a natural buffness that had no lifting required.
I tried my best to focuses on Mrs. Jennet again. Can anyone tell me what a lipid is? This is so easy I thought. And faster than the speed of light my hand went up. Carleen? A lipid is an oil or a wax. I put my hand on the desk and then quickly on my lap when I notice my artwork was conspicuous for everyone, even Jason!
After class I walked to my locker with Genie. Genie and I have been the best of friends from kinder till fifth then we were officially sisters. She was nitpicking about her grade on the quiz. How am I supposed to know this stuff if I cant study!? I looked at her as if she missed the biggest detail. Genie, Genie my dearest Genie What? There was a review packet and a review test. I smiled hysterically. Oh, I forgot all about it. Well I have to go, by Carlee.
I started to unlock my locker, but messed up so while I was trying again, Jason was walking towards me. I acted like I didn't see him but when I finally opened it he was just gawking at me. It was kind of weird because he is like twenty or so inches taller. He waited like it was my queue to act on. Can I help you? I said with a fake smile. Um, yes actually I came to ask for Carleens number, do you know it? Inside I fainted but I played it cool. Actually I dont remember mine do you want to just give me yours? Yeah, sure, give me your hand. Again the wrong hand was shown to the world. He wrote it clear and slow. When he was done we looked at each other and smiled. Again my dramatic side swooned. Text me, we should really talk more. He said still smiling. Okay. I focused on the rims on his glasses.
Of course I didn't tell him about my parents strict rules they have for boys. But I ended up telling him when we were texting. Hey, my parents are really strict about guys, so just dont make it noticeable to them. I waited for him to respond staring at the phone. Right when I set it down I heard the bell on the phone ring. What do you mean?? So are we dating or something? Um, that was not supposed to be read that way! No, I mean my mom doesn't like me being friends with guys but if you really want to date then yeah sure. This time I put the phone down and he didn't respond the whole night. -
Hi.
I hope not to be too assertive but I believe you've posted this in the wrong forum.
Try posting this in The Library, it will fit better and you can post your stories here without a problem. -
*there without a problem
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petunia_24 Newbiei have found that people on the library don't respond to my writings so i thought id try here but it might just be because they aren't interested. I'm sorry if it bothered you.
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No, that's alright. You haven't been here long so I wouldn't expect you to be an expert. I'll let it slide.
It probably isn't that they aren't interested, but there's not alot of people here right now. -
petunia_24 NewbieI just don't know if my writing is any good, it's my first time showing other people.
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It's very good from what I've read. I think that you're a nice, fluent writer. Just a tip though - maybe you can describe each place more to be more imaginative so that we can actually picture ourselves in the situation. If we can visualize during a story, that probably means it's literate and neat.
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petunia_24 NewbieThank you for not being a jerk about it and for the tips. You seem like a very nice person.
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Thank you and you're welcome. I sometimes write stories both online and in real life so I guess I know a thing or two, but I wouldn't say I'm too experienced.
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petunia_24 NewbieI feel like it will take a while to improve since I'm only 14.
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scarletforever NoviceIt's a really good story. So real. I'd die if I was Carleen.
And is it creepy that my parents have the same rules as hers? -
petunia_24 NewbieIt's how my parents are too. The rest is in the library.
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