My Thread!! :)
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Thread Topic: My Thread!! :)
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b---- that is so nice!! What the heck are you saying!!
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my writing always seems so choppy or boring to me >
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From what I can tell checking it a second time, it doesn't seem choppy at all. The sentences flow nicely.
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ahhh well thank you!!! it's probably bc it's my own writing and im over critical and all
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Dystopia
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Even if it seems choppy, it's still good. Choppy sentences can be part of the character/it adds a layer to their personality.
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wassup Jay in this dystopian world
meg- oh true!!! it could lend to the confusion and future panic of what was gonna happen
u right!! -
My heart raced as I neared the throng. The shouts of "Get him!" and the periodic "ooohs!" planted an undesirable conclusion in my mind. I despise violence. He knows that better than anyone, I'm sure. I doubted he would stoop that low, or do something he knew I didn't like during this confrontation.
I cleared a path as politely as I could manage, projecting pardons on the way. Once I saw the scene in front of me, all politeness had left my soul.
"You know I hate fighting!" I shrieked. My voice rose above all the others.
My boyfriend had Ronnie again the ground and had been wailing at him, probably since the crowd formed. My former best friend looked rather miserable and injured. I felt pity, somehow.
I was acknowledged, but overall, ignored. I had to step in.
I inhaled deeply through my nose and let it out angrily. Throwing my jacket to the ground, I jumped in, securing a rough hold on his waist.
I was impressed with myself. I'm pretty small and weak and I just jumped into a brutal fight with my boyfriend.
Don't get distracted.
I used the little strength I possessed to pull my boyfriend completely off of Ronnie and set him aside. As soon as I let go, he attempted to run back, but I didn't let him. The students that gathered around gasped and wooped at my actions.
I ignored them. "What the hell was that?" I yelled.
He winced at my rare raised voice. "Was I supposed to let him hit me too?" He retorted.
All my cool was lost. I tolerate an unreasonable amount of malarkey. I let people demean me. I allow them to hurt me physically. I even turn the other cheek when the whole school is teasing me.
But no one, I mean no one lays a single cuticle on my boyfriend. -
fight scenes are hard bc im a wuss who can't fight LMAO
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to anyone just reading bc they know i occasionally write in here
yes the boyfriend has a name and all
it's kinda embarrassing bc i based it on one of my waifus so i just don't state his name ever xD
i should probably just use a fake name but on the inside
i know who this is xD -
let's go with..... Callum huehuehue
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whoa im out here enjoying my life and my mind just said "open ya skin" like WHOA no???? don't u dare????? i been doing so good???
my b---- ass better not ruin this good run for me lmao -
it's been so dead all day what the heck :(
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I wasn't on all day.
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that's true
u rlly are the life of the party :3
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