errrr
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Thread Topic: errrr
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I got the gun against my head
This time you can't stop me
If I pull the trigger I'm dead
I'm not what you want me to be
All I ever do is lie from you
Now I'm starting to go crazy
I'M LOSING EVERYTHING!!!
(I'm falling apart)
It's not okay
It's not okay
It's not okay -
Do you know,that I Watch you while you sleep?
I Swear I'm not obsessed
(swear I'm not obsessed)
YOU NEED THE GUTS LIKE ME TO WIN!!!!
I HOPE YOU'LL BE ABLE TO JOIN ME!!!!
I've been having thoughts of suicide
And only you can help me
(help me)
just Forget about me -
A little too obvious and on the nose. I have nothing against angry, depressing lyrics, but they have to be done well or else they can't really be taken seriously.
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Just as an example, this is how I would rewrite your first song.
I feel their guns against my head
And no one will save me
A hail of bullets, I'm left dead
I'm not what they want me to be
All I ever do is die for you
And I know I'm losing my mind
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