Working on writing a short story, looking for feedback
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Thread Topic: Working on writing a short story, looking for feedback
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This is mostly for fun, but it's also my attempt to see if I've improved my writing skills this year. I have the plot planned out from start to finish, I'm just easily distracted and write semi-slow, lol. You can actually watch me write real-time if you're seeing this post now!
Plot: This story is set at a boarding school that exclusively allows students with magic. All of the students are either human or half human. The twist is that the school is advertised as a "rigorous place intended to help young witches and wizards reach their full potential," but it's actually rather abusive in nature.
If a student fails to properly execute a spell, they'll likely be physically punished. If they fail to follow the rules, they'll be severely punished. Students with consistent failures are locked away in magic-suppressing rooms without food or water, often for days. Some families are aware of the truth of the school, while others have no idea that they've sentenced their children to psychological and physical torture.
The short story follows a group of older boys (18-21 in age) that refuse to follow the rules and thrive off of being immature and wild. Their spirits have not yet been broken by the constant beatings and mild torture. The main focus is on two of the boys: James and Renjin. The very beginning of the story has a small bit of James' inner thoughts, while the bulk of the story will be focused on Renjin. These boys (along with some of Renjin's friends) have a plan to go off into a restricted area of their dorm building. What they find ends up changing their lives forever. -
I started reading it, and it was really good! But then I got to the cussing part and I had to stop because I'm on the school's chromebook, and it's a christian school, so you understand.
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I will censor out the cussing for you! I didn't think about that, sorry!
I'm done writing for the night -
Is ass considered a curse word, or is it okay??
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Probably be on the safe side.
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I used the black highlight tool to mark over all of the curse words. :* Hopefully that makes it safer to read (I can always temporarily remove them entirely, too).
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Ok. Thanks.
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Thank you for reading! :)
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I like it! Are you going to write more?
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i saw this thread and attempted to read the story, but i didn't have access. i am also on a school computer.
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Yes! My goal is to keep working on this whenever I have spare time. I really want to finish it. It'll probably end up being like, 15-20 pages worth of content. 😅
I can copy & paste it onto on a different thread later today for you. 💪 -
I love it. I cant wait for more!
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I think I'd better read it on that thread too.
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I copied & pasted everything I have so far in this thread:
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