Make out in the rain
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This story is one of mine from wattpad but I wanted more opinions on it. Here is chapter one! (Btw, Connie is Noodlerella)
A/N This chapter has lots of blood and alarming scenes. Just a warning!
It all happened so fast.
A moment before, you were tightly holding hands with both Dan Howell and Phil Lester in a swerving taxi. Then you collided. Glass flew everywhere. You hear Phil screaming your name before falling silent. Turning to Dan, he tries to hold you close. Cradling you; protecting you. The searing pain down your leg and the blood. Oh, so much blood. Pouring from the front seat where the driver was. Oozing from Phil's unconscious body. Dripping from Dan's face and erupting from your leg. Black. The shard of glass up in your face, then black.
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You awoke to insanely bright lights and white ceiling. Panicking suddenly, you sit up to see yourself in a hospital bed, your left leg casted. You seem to be the only one in the ward other than a bed across from you with closed curtains. You look around further. You noticed the rhythmic beeping of your monitor and the same across the room. You assumed the person opposite you was in the same sort of position you were in. A doctor came bustling in, a clipboard in one hand. "Ah, Y/N, you're awake." You nodded as the man sat beside your bed. "Do you recall anything happening at the car crash?" You think for a moment. Clear visions played in your mind of the crash. You remember waking slightly when the car was stationary. Phil was gone. Dan was unconscious and the driver was dead. "Where's Dan and Phil?" You ask, your voice wobbling. The doctor nodded toward the bed opposite you. "Daniel woke up a few hours ago. We couldn't find Philip's body. I'm sorry." The doctor walks to the other side of the room to pull back Dan's curtain. He's lying there, his arm bandaged. He see's you and immediately brightens, a smile crossing his face. "Y/N!" He croaks. The doctor smiles. "You are both due to be released tomorrow." You smile at this news. You look beside you and see flowers and a card. "Dear Y/N. Please get through this for me, I have no idea what I'd do without you! Love, Connie xx" With a small smile you put the card down. Connie Glynn was the only person aside from Dan and Phil, who knew you inside and out. There for you 24/7 and always the first to know anything. Looking over at Dan you see he has sat up, watching you. "Do you perhaps know the date and time?" He asks. You look beside you and see Connie also left you an alarm clock. "Twenty-fifth of March 2011 and the time is two fifty pm." you reply. Dan nods. "Thanks!" You lay down slightly, noticing how tired you are. You want to stay awake for Dan though. "You can sleep, Y/N. I'll sleep too." You hear Dan say. You curl up uncomfortably with your casted leg and fall asleep.
-Dan's POV-
I watch as y/n falls asleep. I notice that she has flowers and a card on her bedside table. I look to my own bedside table and see a card. I open it. "I couldn't leave you out! Get well soon Dan! Love, Connie." I smiled. Maybe I could get through this, even without Phil.... -
A romance story, I assume.
Overall it's good and entertaining. I like it, tbh.
What I find a little bit unattractive in the story is that, the scenes change faster than usual. I see that you're probably trying to keep the reader down to earth and you're not letting their emotions to flow... But I'd suggest you that, you could make it a little bit more emotional. Try emphasizing on feelings.
Besides, the doctor looks like someone they are already familiar with. Make the doctor a little bit formal.
And also, don't stop posting. -
Chapter 2;
-Your POV-
You finish your bacon-and-egg bap and shove the table away, wiped the excess egg yolk from your chin. Why was hospital food so good? You asked yourself. You looked over to Dan who had just received his own breakfast. You watched in fascination as Dan hungrily ate. He bit into the egg yoke and it exploded, dripping from his hands and face. You stifle a laugh as he messily tries to clean himself up. "You know, you could try to help!" He said, pretending to be annoyed. You grab your crutches and hobble over. The crutches were for practise as it was only an hour before you could go home. You grab a few tissues from Dan's bedside table and wipe his chin, smiling. He looks up at you and grins. A mischievous glint in his eyes worries you slightly. He suddenly flicks yolk at your face. Gasping, you wipe it off. Silence follows until you both burst out laughing. Footsteps make you both shut up. "Ah, Daniel, Y/N, You'll be pleased to know that you are free to go!" The doctor pulls out two plastic bags for your stuff. You wobble over to your bed and put everything in the bag, Dan doing the same. The doctor returns your clothes and you throw them on behind the curtain. Grabbing your crutches, you pull the curtain back to see Dan waiting for you. "There's a taxi outside." The doctor says, giving you both your phones. You hobble out with Dan at your side and get into the taxi. You look out the window. Events play back in your head. One name stands clear. Phil. Phil was dead.
~*~
You sobbed loudly as you packed clothes and a toothbrush. You zipped the bag up and shove your good foot in a shoe. With your crutches, you hobble out the door, locking it before calling a cab to Dan's apartment.
"Come in." You hear Dan call. You open the door, still sobbing slightly, and slowly make your way into the living room. Dan is sat on the couch, his head in his good hand. He looked up and saw you standing there, clearly not caring that you had tears pouring from your eyes. His eyes were red, signifying he was going over the situation himself. "C-can I s-stay Dan?" You ask shakily. Dan nodded silently. You dropped your bag on the floor and openly cried. Dan opened his good arm sympathetically, and you didn't hesitate and fell into his hug, throwing your crutches on the floor. You sobbed into his neck whilst he comforted you, rubbing your back and telling you he was there for you. He lay back on the couch, you still in his arms, and cuddled you. Something about his presence made you feel safe, like nothing could hurt you again.
-Dan's POV-
Y/N was distraught. I knew that when she turned up at my apartment that she wasn't leaving any time soon. It was late by the time she began trying to unpack. I helped her, setting up the pull out bed in the office. She kept thanking me, rooting through her bag. She sighed and grabbed her keys. "Where are you going?" I asked. She couldn't be leaving the house at this hour! "To get my pyjamas." She replied. I heard the front door open. I jogged into the hallway and closed it. "No. You aren't going anywhere." She looked at her feet. Suddenly, I had an idea. I ran upstairs and pulled out my onesies. I run back downstairs and see Y/N curled up in an armchair, hugging her knees. She looked adorable. I chucked the Totoro onesie at her. She looked up, confused. "Put it on!" I said. She had a hard time sliding her casted leg into the onesie. She called for help. I went to the bathroom and stood outside the door. "Yep?" She giggled a bit. "I'm stuck. The door's unlocked please help." I chuckled a little and opened the door. She was stood in the centre of the room with one leg in the onesie and one out, the rest of her in underwear. I rubbed the back of my neck and looked down, blushing. She laughed slightly. "I won't bite! Get your ass over here!" I chuckled again and walked over to her. I sorted her out and zipped up the onesie and pulled up the hood. Happiness, sadness and admirableness shined in her eyes. I came so close to her face I felt like kissing her. Instead, I picked up her crutches and led her from the room.
I liked her. What should I do? -
Noice!
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(There are eight chapters, and here is number the third)
-Dan's POV-
As we curled up on the couch watching Deathnote, I felt Y/N fall limp. I myself had changed to my dinosaur onesie, which led to the fond nickname of 'Dinosaur Boy.' I looked down at Y/N to see she was asleep. Smiling at her cuteness, I carried her to the office. I lay her on the bed and pulled the covers over her. She stirred a little. I leant down and kissed her cheek before making my way to my own room.
-Your POV-
You saw everything. Car crash again, clearer. This time you saw Phil's dead body roll from the car and look to you with dead, white eyes. You awoke with a start in the office. Dan must have carried you. Sweating, you grab your crutches and hobble over to Dan's room. You knock quietly. "Mm?" Dan sounds tired, as if he hadn't slept at all. "I can't sleep..." You whimper, slightly nervous. You here a slight rustling. "Come in 'ere then!" You poke your head around the door to see red-eyed Dan sat up looking at you. You hobble in and stand there awkwardly. Dan rolls his eyes and pulls the covers back, gesturing for you to get in with him. Your crutches drop to the floor as you snuggle up with Dan. He wraps his arms around you and whispers. "I know why you can't sleep. It's the same for me." His words make you snuggle closer to him. "Night!" You say. "Night.." Dan replies. You feel suddenly a lot safer with Dan and it wasn't long before you fell asleep with Dan.
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"Morning!" Dan says as he walks into the kitchen. You smile. He looks you up and down. "Why are you dressed?" He asks. You put your coffee down and grab your keys. "Picking up some stuff from home then I promise I'll come straight back." You Hobble to the door and turn back to Dan. "I'll get my controllers!" You call. Dan laughs. "You have the day planned then hey??" Nodding, you open the door and leave.
You rip open the letter eagerly. "Dear Miss Y/L/N, we are pleased to inform you that you have an appointment with the hospital to remove your cast. Please be on time. 1st of June, 1:40 PM." You squeal. You're finally gonna have your leg free! Swinging a plastic bag over your shoulder, you leave, happy.
Maybe you were okay with Dan. After all, you kind of liked him.... -
(My grammar and writing skills improve I promise)
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Mhmm...
*expects more* -
lol ur amazing CP
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(I know, *smiles proudly* thanks)
IM SERIOUSLY WAITING FOR MORE!!! -
Rlly? Here's 4 then:
"Come over tomorrow. I have a surprise if you want!"
"What time were you thinking?"
"Twelve? I can do earlier!"
"Twelve is perfect!"
Yes. It was almost one in the morning and you were texting Connie. To be honest, you were surprised she was replying. Yawning, you switched off your phone and put it down, sleep catching you in it's safe hands.
~*~
You let Dan walk you to Connie's place. As you walked in, a flurry of cute and fluffy swept you into a hug. As she released you, Dan placed a hand on your shoulder. "Come home safely!" He mutters and swiftly leaves. Connie beamed at you, her adorable eyes shining. "Come upstairs quick!" She urges as she dashes up the stairs. She reappears at the landing. "Oh yeah....." She smiles again. "Stay down here, I'll bring the stuff to you!" She dashes upstairs as you relax on her couch. She comes back in with a bottle, a bowl and towels. Confused, you tilt your head. Connie gestures to the bathroom door. Obeying, you sit in there on a stool, your back to the sink. Connie smiles. "Pink hair?" She shakes the bottle. This time, you smile. "Yesssssss!" Connie squirts the different solutions and mixed them. You brush your hair out, letting it fall around your shoulders. Putting gloves on, Connie sits on the toilet lid. She slathers the solution on your hair, massaging it into your scalp. Pink hair. What would Dan think?
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-Dan's POV-
I heard the door open. Rushing to help Y/N through the house, I notice her hair. It was pink! Not hot pink, a nice, pastel pink. It suited her! She collapsed onto the sofa, smiling. "Good time?" I asked. She nodded vigorously. I smiled. I was glad she was happy.
A/N I know nobody reads my stuff, but if you do please say something!
This chapter was crap, but I promise there is better to come. -
and 5 because I can
A/N I was meant to publish this on Dan's actual birthday but I decided that I would now because I have no other good material XD If your reading this on Dan's birthday, ignore this note!
Nothing much happened between you for a while. You get your leg un-casted and apart from the odd coddle on the sofa during a film or anime and the occasional bed-share with excuses of "Nightmares" or "It's to cold", you and Dan were neutral. Until today. The big day. Dan's birthday.
You slip from Dan's arms and silently creep downstairs, careful to make as little noise as possible. As you walk into the living room, excitement takes control. The photos were perfect. They were happy little treasures in the sad sand pile of the present. You knew Dan would like them. After writing the card, you lit a candle and curled up in an armchair, waiting for Dan to wake up.
-Dan's POV-
I woke up with empty arms. I patted the space where Y/N would have laid. Assuming she was awake already, I threw on some clothes messily. I jogged downstairs. The lights were out. There was a dim light in the living room. I walked in slowly to see Y/N curled up in an armchair next to a table with a single candle lit on it. A book with a card stood beside the candle. I opened the card. "Dan. Thank you for everything you have done to support me and everyone else, I wouldn't have got through this without you. Happy Birthday Dinosaur boy. Love, Y/N." I closed the card and lay it on the table. The book had a tag reading "Dan xx" I glanced over at Y/N, who sighed in her sleep. Smiling I opened the book. Pictures of me and Phil were in pockets spread all over every page. I skimmed through, happiness filling me. On the very last page was a picture of all three of us together, me and Phil with our arms around a grinning Y/N.
-Your POV-
You woke up to see tears in Dan's eyes. You look down and see his scrapbook open in his hands. You sit up on the edge of the chair. "Dan! I'm sorry, I thought you would like it I-" You were cut of as Dan carefully lay the book on the table before scooping you up in his arms. He spun you round once before bringing you into a tight hug. You feel tears fall down your back. "Thank you..." Dan mumbles. With tears in your own eyes, you hug Dan tighter. "Your welcome Dinosaur boy" You whisper.
A/N So yeah, there is the first part of Dan's birthday! I know this x reader is a pile of s--- (excuse my language) But I spend hours preparing the chapters and thinking them through. This is set in 2011-2013 (So there will be a random time jump somewhere) so Dinosaur-boy and stuff like that is allowed (Just so that I don't end up with phangirls like myself screaming at me XD) -
MHMMMM
MORE!!!! -
AND SIX)
A/N HAPPY BIRTHDAY TO DAN!!!!
As many people in the phandom know, the day I publish this part is the real Dan Howell's 26th birthday!
(Warning: slight smut alert)
Dan stood and stretched. The two of you spent all day on a Harry Potter marathon. You got up to, flexing your newly uncast leg. You picked up your phone and linked it to Dan's sound system. At first, you played Panic! At the disco. You sang along, Dan humming whilst munching the remainder of the popcorn. The bowl soon emptied, and Dan left the room as Death of a bachelor ended. An advertisment from Spotify played, and as Dan entered the room, a slow dance song began. You picked up your phone to change the song. "Don't change it." You looked up to see Dan staring at you. You put your phone back down and looked back up. Dan extended his hand and you took it slowly. Dan pulled you up and began dancing. Smiling, you played along. You laughed as Dan spun you around at the right times and seemed to know what he was doing. Exhausted, you closed your eyes. Dan carefully rested his hands on your hips. You wrapped you arms around his neck and you both swayed lazily. The music stopped but you were still swaying. Dan gazed into your eyes. You felt butterflies. Slowly, you leant in and eventually you felt Dan's lips against you own. You kissed furiously until it faded into a slow, steady pace. This was a full on make out session. Dan snaked his arms around your waist. He broke away briefly. "f---." He whispered. "What? What is it?" You asked. Dan smirked. "I think I just fell in love with you." He winked before pulling you back into a kiss. He began to unzip the onesie. "Dan, I-" You whispered. Dan's smirk changed into a naughty grin. He winked again, knocking you to the couch and landing on top of you. You turned and blew the candle out in a single puff, leaving the only light to be from the moon pouring in from the window.
-End of birthday part 2-
A/N Yes, I know it's really short and I'm sorry, but enjoy! -
AND SEVEN)
Dan's POV:
I woke up to find Y/N in my arms, our underwear all over the floor, and the onesies pulled loosely over us. I freaked. I leapt up and checked myself, and thankfully we used protection. I still panicked, so I ran to the bathroom. I ran the tap and pulled the condom off myself and filled it. Relief waved over me as the water safely poured inside. I went to my bedroom and got changed into the first things I could find. I wasn't sure whether to be scared or chilled, because I knew I'd taken her virginity. What would she do? What would she think? I stalked into the kitchen silently and made us breakfast. I leant against the counter and took a deep breath, thoughts confusing me. I left Y/N's breakfast on the table and slipped back into my room. I sat at the desk and put my head in my hands. What had I done?
Your POV:
Your eyes opened slowly. Memories flooded back like a waterfall. You looked around the room and noticed yours and Dan's underwear piled on the floor. Would he be mad at you? You knew that you definitely wasn't mad at him. He's the only person you trusted enough to lose your virginity to, but was he scared you would hate him? You zipped the Totoro over your naked body and walked into the kitchen. The ache in your legs was worse than you expected, and your knees gave way. You landed with your palms down. You would get through this. You stood shakily and made your way over to the table. You smiled at the breakfast Dan left You. You thankfully positioned yourself at the table and wolfed it down. You finished with a glass of orange juice, then leant yourself against the counter. You took a shaky breath in. The pain in you legs was almost unbearable. You made a vow that you would get through it, and that Dan was the only person you trusted with something like your virginity. You struggled up the stairs and pulled some clean underwear on. You changed into my favourite chilled-out outfit. (A hype jumper and black jeans) You heard small noises from Dan's room, and decided that you would explain how you felt. You knocked, but there was no answer. You opened the door and saw Dan with his head in his hands. He looked so upset. "Dan?" He looked up at you, tears in his perfect eyes. You melted just then. "Oh, Dan! I'm not mad at you, okay?" You felt tears in your own eyes as you kneeled beside Dan, your legs throbbing. Dan looked down. "Yes you are. I took it away, Y/N, I took it away!" His voice was wobbly. You felt your heart break a bit. "No, Dan, I'm not. You are the only person I trust enough to take my virginity. I'm not mad, Dan. I was scared you'd be mad at me!" You sobbed slightly and looked up to meet Dan's eyes. "I f---ing love you Daniel!" Two tears slipped down your face as you expressed yourself. Dan's eyes widened. "Are you sure?" he seemed hopeful. "Yes, I'm bloody sure, silly! Why wouldn't I be?" Dan looked down. "I thought you would hate me..." You rolled your eyes. "Dan. No. Stop." You lifted his chin with one hand. "I don't hate you." His eyes lit up a little, and you closed the small gap between you, meeting your lips. Tears fell, both yours and Dan's. You broke away slowly. "I love you too, Y/N" Dan said. He wiped away the tears that were obnoxiously dripping from your eyes.
That was it. You loved Daniel James Howell, and he loved you too. Now it would be a little easier to get through this.
~*~
Connie, we have to talk. I know it's early but this is urgent.
You awaited her reply. It was 5AM, and neither you or Dan could sleep. You decided to tell Connie what happened between the two of you, but only Connie.
What's up noodle??
Relief spread through you as Connie replied.
Can you come over? To Dan's please? There's something you need to know -
AND FINALLY< EIGHT UNTOL I UPDATE)
I'll be over in an hour
You smiled at Connie's eager reply. You swung around on Dan's lap so that you were facing him. It was 5:30AM, and neither of you could sleep. Today would mark a whole month since the crash, since Phil went missing. The two of you were choked up with grief. "You okay, Danny-boy?" You fiddled with his curled fringe. "I'll be okay...." He looked down, his eyes glazed over. You bring his chin up with a finger. "No. We will be okay." You kissed him, him kissing back without hesitation. "I love you." He whispered, breaking away and leaning his head on your chest. "I love you too, don't ever forget that." You moved off his lap and walked to the kitchen. You were going to make Dan the best breakfast he'd ever had. You cooked some bacon and laid it in a circle along the edge of a plate. You fried an egg and placed it in the centre. You squirted a ring of barbeque sauce around the egg, and took the plate out to Dan. His eyes lit up immediately...
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Connie stared. "What did you say?" Her voice was whispery. "I said, Dan and I are..... weareacouple" Connie's eyes widened. "I knew it!" She leapt up and started jumping around the room. "I knew it, I knew it, I knew it!!" She was squealing by the time she finished her last I knew it. "Connie, calm the f--- down!" You giggled. Dan was chuckling behind you. "I'm glad you're excited Connie." Connie sat back down and hugged you. "I knew you'd fall for him eventually! You always go on about him when we're together!" You blushed hard. Dan chuckled even more. "Tell me more!" Connie went off on a tangent, telling Dan exactly what you say about him. The morning ended with you blushing so hard you felt like your face would burst, Dan on floor laughing hard, and Connie sat crossed legged, explaining the time you had fallen off your chair at Connie's and said "I did a Dan!" Connie had to leave. "Thanks for telling me, Noodle. See you soon!" She chimed as she skipped out the door. You waved before closing the door and walking into the living room. You were bombarded by Dan, who picked you up, wrapping your legs around his waist. He took you into the kitchen, not breaking eye contact, and set you on the kitchen side, as if you were a child. He took the pin that held your hair up, and your pink hair fell around your shoulders. He held your hands and leaned forward and kissed you lightly. You closed your eyes and deepened the kiss. He licked your bottom lip, and you opened you mouth slightly. He slipped his tongue into your mouth, and you fought for dominance, you losing...
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