Can someone critique what i have so far
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Thread Topic: Can someone critique what i have so far
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Chapter 1
I looked around the parking lot and smiled as I inhaled the semi-cold air. It was a beautiful night and you could hear the crickets chirping in the distance. You could also hear the loud thumping noises that came from the trunk of my car. I just laughed and pulled out a cigarette as I walked up to the drivers side of the car and got in. As I put the keys in the ignition I heard my victim let out an ear-piercing scream and I rolled my eyes.
DAMN it! I yelled, opening the car door with a slight frustration and grabbed the duct tape that was sitting beside me. I sighed as I took the key out of the ignition and made my way to the back of the car. As I opened the trunk the screaming simmered down and the young male that was there just whimpered. I told YOU to say QUIET! I growled as I tore off a piece of duct tape from the roll and placed it roughly on his mouth. Say one more word, and it wont end well for you. After that I closed the trunk and walked back to the front of the car and started it up, then started to drive.
Finally, after what seemed like hours, I arrived at the log cabin my friend let me use for the weekend. I parked the car, then walked to the trunk and opened it. The young male was there, but he was unconscious. At first, I got a little worried because if he wasnt breathing I would get to have my fun with him, but then I noticed him breathing and grinned like a shark. I picked him up out of the trunk and carried him inside. I looked around, then spotted the couch and laid him there. I quickly locked all of the doors and windows, making sure there wasnt a way he could escape.
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