Could somebody with writing skills critique this?
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Thread Topic: Could somebody with writing skills critique this?
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Please? Dark? Br0wnie?
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I like it. You could have added a little bit more details describing the scene of the land where Pearl and Rose warped in chapter two, and used more imagery to describe the emotions and actions of the characters. It went by a little fast, though could have easily lasted longer if there was more detail in there. But it could just be me. I may give you a longer critique when I'm feeling better.
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Thank you.
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I think that all of the parts could use some more in them. The prologue almost started off confusing, and if someone didn't know what Steven Universe was, they might not understand it well either. Try adding more details in all of your chapters and think about the audience you'll have. It's pretty good otherwise.
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BB pretty much hit up all of that, though, so. x3
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Thanks.
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