Down To The Detail
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Thread Topic: Down To The Detail
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What if Wonderland wasn't the kind, soft place you've read in storybooks? What if the two twins were murders? The hatter a bloody mess of demon? Perhaps a queen who wants more than just a head? Or the cat a punk rock freak that also kills? Sadly, in this place, you can't leave. Only through death. And what's that poor noise coming from the door.....?
"Wonderland is falling down,
Falling down,
Falling down,
Wonderland is falling down.
My dear Alyce...."
DTTD is a concept I've been wanting to explore. Poor Alyce is dragged into Wonderland, full of bloody battle grounds. No fuzzy white rabbit with a pocketwatch here- just a girl who controls voices of shouldn't-be-alive objects. No nice but a little mad hatter. A demon who only protects Alyce and will kill anyone else. Everyone's fighting for Alyce. Alyce, the girl of the heart of Wonderland. Poor Alyce. -
I'm going to put a key of the names for the old characters and what they are.
The two twins that were once known as Tweedle Dee and Tweedle Dum are called Violet and Voice within this story. When the two twins are together, their killing voices open, thus giving them the granted name of "Murder Twins". Violet is an actual demon while Voice is a hacked human with ultimate powers much like a superhero.
The hatter that had once been known on most occasions as Hatter or The Mad Hatter is called Little Mad. Little dislikes wearing hats, however- he makes them as weapons to use against other pawns of the blood lusting teams. Little Mad is parshly human with red demon eyes and a demon side to him that he uses in battle.
The cat that had once been known as Cheshire or The Cheshire Cat is called Chesshire. Chess loves rubbing blood along his fur- so much that he cut his cheeks wider so he could smile forever at the people within the war. Chesshire uses his spiked up fur and claws for slaying his victoms that are usually children. -
The white rabbit that had once been known as White Rabbit is called Resound. Resound dislikes the war going on and talks to the doors with mouths that cannot speak. She made a contract with the doors, and now she happily speaks for them to the people. Resound hides within secret rooms the doors create for her so she can stay away from the blood bath.
The march hare that had once been known as March Hare is called Revoice. Revioce was created by the Murder Twin Voice to try and follow Resound. (Revoice is technically Resound's evil sister in the storyline.) She ties people to chairs and happily hurts them until they vanish one way. -
*A little mad hatter, a demon who only protects Alyce and will kill anyone else.
*Revoice -
The red and white queen that were once known as Red, Red Queen, White, White Queen, are called Blood and Rose. The two sisters are in actual love with each other and are always ordering people to get cut up for amusement. Blood can control some of the non-intense minds, and Rose can seduce any man within the blink of an eye to her beck and call. The two started the blood bath and seek to end it together.
These were the main characters, and I felt that you'd want to know them better. I'll type the beginning tomorrow for you guys. -
I'm intrigued.
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So amazing! x3
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Make that tomorrow. I'm still writing the first chapter.
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Back Between Time, Flashback 1: 2001
"Come along, dear Alyce."
The voice rung out as clear as day. Little Alyce peeped her soft brown eyes up from behind a tree.
The tree was, in many ways, odd. Instead of the normal green round-ish leaves most people prefer, the leaves were twisted and gnarled like a metal spring. Their neon velvet centers sparkled within the sunlight, their bodies a peculiar sky blue. The trunk of these weird leaves within this weird tree? A beyond bright green trunk that looked so oddly out of place with it's vast roots sprawled out along the ground.
"Whatever for, Little Mad? I wanted to climb your Twickleberry tree..." Alyce piped up, her little voice also ringing out. She jumped out from behind the now-known Twickleberry tree. Poor little Alyce! Her once beautiful orange hair was strung with the Twickleberry's leaves, caught in the knots of orange hair. The velvet-blue leaves shimmered like mad. Her once lively white gown with little sown-on fake roses was covered with mud and paint. She looked like a little rainbow. And her once pretty feet? Covered with little fuffy black snails. (For the snails here had fur.) -
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This sounds really good! I can't wait to hear more :D
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Thank you.
(And since I can't write good details, I'm trying to draw them. :3) -
Present-day: California
In Alyce's Room
Alyce ignored the shouts of her name as she listened to her favorite singer, Pitbull. (To her, he really was a singer. His rap music was delightful.) She could barely hear the foot steps pouding on the hard wood floor, or the shouts of a teasing person behind the door. Her voice came through the door as she sang along.
"DUN NUH NUH NUH, I JUST WANT TO FEEL THIS MOMENT~" she yelled, dancing along the floor. Suddenly, Alyce's brother kicked her door open, tackling her. She yelped in shock as she fell backwards onto her bed, the MP3 player falling out of her hand and onto her messy floor. James laughed in triumph. Alyce whined out a complaint. The two wrestled around for a while. Music continued to blare out from the headphones.
"You pervert!" James yelled, holding Alyce down.
"Pitbull isn't a pervert! I'm not a pervert! You are! YOU'RE TOUCHING MEEEE!" she wailed.
"Not really. You're listening to some pretty dirty crap."
"It's not crap!"
"Is too."
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*pounding
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Yes, this is a very good start. Can't wait to read more.
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