your supernatural love life part 1 | Comments

This was good. Some mistakes and you didn't use some periods when you should've. And the same thing for commas. But trust me, you will get better at it if you keep on writing. I say by the time you're at like either the 5th or 7th chapter, you'll be pretty good at writing. So, keep up the good work, and.... Get the next part out :P.