Fight For Peace
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Thread Topic: Fight For Peace
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Fight For Peace: Group soap
Romance and Fantasy
A few chosen children were at a underground lab facility. They were all inserted with a special ability. Some had species in their 'drug'. Most got abilities like shadows, fire, air, earth, etc. The rare abilities and species are demonic, angelic, angel, demon, werewolf, zombie, shadows, light, dark, and time. Very few got these rare abilities and lived. People who had these abilities mainly died. The drug had spread to the world. The drug mostly spread to children. The children were took to the lab facility. For some reason the lab chose for the kids to play chess and whoever loses gets a beaten and no food. Whoever wins gets food and no beaten also with a special reward.
Many, many years past of suffer. Everyone were ten through twenty. The teenagers and adults didn't have much chose but to stay there. The first group of children were best friends since the lab facility chooses a day for all the 'supernatural beings' to be 'friends'. The best friends planned how to escape but they had to do it when there was only a very few guards.
Outside of the lab lived guardians which the scientists first made when the drug was created. They had sentnall the guardians free. These guardians were created to help whoever has the special powers of their main ability. (Ex: a power ice element gets the ice guardian). The guardians were their to help but since everyone were at the facility they had to wait. By that time the drug spread to adults and elders. The teenagers planning to escape had to fight for peace.
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Wait, I don't understand this plot at all.
So an underground lab developed a drug to give people superpowers, and gave this drug to a selection of children for some reason? And after all the kids died, the drug somehow escaped the lab and went worldwide? Was it marketed? Was death an undocumented side effect? Was it actually a virus?
So after the drug/virus/magic went worldwide and infected people, the lab somehow captured everyone who displayed superpowers and tortured them for no real reason? ("Man, they don't pay me enough to NOT make them evil.")
So then several years later a group of adults chose to break out, and I'm assuming that's the players?
And at some point in the past the scientists created guardians specifically designed to couch these villains, and then let them out into the world for no reason instead of keeping them to teach the kids? Why? Whose funding these guys, the Umbrella Corporation? -
I'll retype the plot for you to understand just give me a minute
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A scientist named Derek. Derek was very interested with in mythology. He began his interest from his two kids. Derek began trying to create these powers. He was sucessful when creating the guardians in the year 3000 on March 4. He created the guardians by each special element. No one really knew what was in the this 'drug' Derek had created. People knew there was a few rare abilities and regular abilities. Derek told people that the lab facility was a academy. After a few 'students' came Derek randomly chose a few kids. He gave the drug to the children. The kids soon after had these abilites. Derek trusted all his crew members. He gave each one of his work. Soon after a few days children began dying. The drug wasn't didn't had any side effects. The redid the drug and realized there was a side effect. Which wa death. One of Derek closet friends began copying the drug. He sold it to everyone in the small town he lives in. No one really knew how this spread but for sure if someone with these magical abilities can give their powers to another. Some people thought it was just reproduction and the children got the parents abilites.
The lab imprisoned everyone who was experimented first. The scientist tortured the children in the lab facility because they were afraid to get killed. The scientist thought if they tortured the children they would be afraid of them. Many years passed and a few teenagers (or adults, yes were are the people who are escaping) planned to escape. The scientist didn't want the children to learn there powers. They were afraid of dying. The people funding the lab facility was the main corporations in the city.
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Wait, how can kids inherent their parents power if the drug killed people within a few days? Hell, why doesn't it kill everyone within a few days? Why were only a few people who took the drug killed, while others were perfectly fine? How can someone copy the drug if no one knows what's in it?
Why would corporations be interested in superpowers? How does that help them sell products or services? Why experiment on children, instead of consenting and specially trained adults? And you still haven't answered anything about the guardians.
I understand that there could be a great story here, but you need to iron out all the problems first. That and learn to proofread. Do you even go over what you've written before you post? -
OK, Ihlaoy you're getting on my nerves, if you want to correct people so much why don't you just open up a school to teach people how to make plots damn at least I tried making the f---ing plot perfect!
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Look, I'm not correcting you, I'm just trying to understand the damn plot. Between the holes and your terrible grammar, it's pretty hard. I hardly think you tried to make the plot perfect if you didn't even bother to proofread it once.
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